Reviews for Harry Potter and the Order of the Light and Dark

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ShadowDragonOfTheMoon 2008-07-03 ch 36,	abuseAWESOME! This story PWNS!! It was so funny when Voldemort returned as a ghost!!
Wolfric 2008-06-24 ch 36,	abuseI have just finished your fine story and I have enjoyed it very much. I'm not particullarly a snape fan but when the story is well written I can certainly enjoy it. In general I think people with responsibility for children should be more mature than the children. Thank you for writing. W.
Lientjuhh 2008-06-22 ch 36,	abuseGreat story... I normally don't like horuxen, but this was a good story... Harry powerfull, Harry rich, Harry smart, Manupulatieve Dumbledore, Great story... Well done... ;) And where I was happy with was that harry/hermoine only became a couple in chapter 36... SO Well done... ;)
rekrula 2008-06-21 ch 11,	abusei consider you a guilty habit. your stories have serious grammer and sentence structure issues, but you are so enthusiastic about telling your story, and you so obviously love the characters. so i'll continue reading. but i wish you would get a better beta reader.
soceress19 2008-06-20 ch 36,	abusepriya ashok, this fanfic was well written and enjoyable to read. i really liked how you ended it and wrapped up all the lose ends. i must admit, having voldemort come back as a ghost and then becoming harry's secretary was really amusing! (i don't think ive read a fanfic thats done that before!!) i liked how you protrayed the characters and made harry powerful but not completely so, and how you made snape's personality and character develop as well as his interaction with harry was fun to read. you filled and explained many a inconsistancy i found in canon in a unique and logical way, well done!! the OC's you added were interesting, didnt take way the focus of the story and weren't mary sues. personally i am no fan of the Harry/Hermione ship but you made it readable and realistic and on the plus side there was ron, ginny and dumbles bashing (yay!) congrats, keep up the writing and well done!
Jan Space 2008-06-14 ch 13,	abuseDamn, the introduction of OCs in this chapter really brought this story down a couple notches. I loved the original premise, and was interested in seeing how things would resolve, but I hate the entire idea of the Lestranges' having children hidden away somewhere, and Arran grated on my nerves throughout chapters 12 and 13. I'm sorry to say I won't be continuing. You're a decent writer bar a few spelling and grammar errors (which are to be expected), but I just can't trudge through pages of complicated, illogical origin stories for unnecessary OCs.
Draeconin 2008-06-05 ch 17,	abuseI'm still reading, so the story still has my interest, but you do use 'and' FAR too much. Shorter sentences aren't a crime, you know.
Draeconin 2008-06-05 ch 16,	abusesigh I am so sad. I saw it coming a long time ago, but I had hoped... Harry-Hermione? Draco-OFC? That's just wrong, when everyone knows that Harry and Draco belong together. (Yes, I'm at least half teasing, although I DO write Harry-Draco.)
Draeconin 2008-06-05 ch 11,	abuseSnape got angry at all the people who'd been less than supportive of Harry, eh? And you don't mention the good professor's own less than than stellar behaviour? That should have been good for a bit of self-loathing, don't you think?
Draeconin 2008-06-05 ch 10,	abuseEnglish is not your native language, is it? In my opinion, you really should try to find a GOOD (adult) beta who will do more than use a spell checker on the story. Someone who is willing to help you improve the English, the phrasing, and the punctuation. Yes, I know that it's complete, but it's not too late to try to make it more easily understandable.
makoyi 2008-05-31 ch 1,	abuseThis story seems like it could be interesting but the dialogue is so awkward that it's uncomfortable for me to read. When you write what a character says, it needs to have their personality in it. The narration can be formal and sometimes there are a few characters that use formal or eccentric speech, but no way should Ron and Ginny sound like they do here. Using commas where they belong would help too. Occasionally, your word order is off and there are some word choice problems (ex: reparations instead of repairing). I'd love to know how this story turns out, but I just don't have the willpower to wade through writing like this right now. If I'm up for the challenge, I might try again later.
projectjay 2008-05-30 ch 1,	abuseadding to favoirtes to read more later.
WhiteHeartBlackSoul 2008-05-26 ch 36,	abuseAbsolutely, adore the ending!
Malicena 2008-05-22 ch 36,	abuseOne of the best stories I've read
WickedWit 2008-05-18 ch 10, anon.	abuseHi, I've been enjoying the story (I love independant!harry, manipulative!dumbledore h/hr fics - they're often a bit cliched, but they're comfort fics the way chocolate chip cookies are comfort food) however one thing really stuck out in chapter 10, and I had to write a review before finishing the story. Guns and the UK just don't go together. It's a problem I see in a fair number of fics. Fact is, it's a LOT easier to get ahold of a gun in the US. Even the police in the UK don't carry them, except a few specially trained officers. It's unrealistic that Hermione's parents, who are dentists (not even police, etc) and probably fairly conservative if she's any indication (not likely to have items from the black market laying around) would have any access to guns at all. I just don't see it.

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