nice. i got goosebumps! ^_^

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marisol akyri

omg, please please PLEASE! write a second chapter to this, i need to read more. I love the plot and i am SO sorry but i didn't see that ending coming. Please write more i am BEGGING you...

Oh no... Jade... died! Sweet lorelei, why??!! I didn't understand the end much... but the other reviews helped. JadexAnise was a bit um, weird though, but, great job!! Your vocabulary was great too!

you killed jade!! O_O BUT this oneshot is very nicely done and has alot of meaning to it. *favs*

You killed Jade! SAD! T.T Also, could you explain JadexAnise to me? I don't get it! Their ages! But anyways, I think someone has been whatching the 6th sense. I still can't believe my sister guessed the ending. Anyways (again), great job! Good but... kinda creapy. And sad if you like Jade alot.

Holy... That almost made me cry! And I'm in a public internet cafe damn it!

Ahem, seriously, that was awesome. Although I never really pictured Jade as someone who'd die so easily. I thought he'd live longer 'cause of his sins :P

Anyway, may I please post this up my site's FanFiction section? It'll be a great addition to our Tales of fanfics list. Also, I might add in any other Tales fics you have. Would that be all right? My site's here: abyssalchronicles(dot)com.

Thanks in advance!

I loved how you ended with the discovery of the Colonel's glasses.
Though I am a bit shaken(?) with the blunt hug of Peony's (I know they loved eachother already!) and the JadexAnise pairing.

OH Colonel!

Oh, you got me. I thought Jade was pulling a prank on Peony or pretending to be dead for some odd reason. *Drops toaster on foot*

Very touching. I liked how it ended.

*Tosses a flying toaster for the heck of it*

I’d say that you opened up the story nicely, although the description is rather brief. I think you could have described Nephry a little bit more, since nine years have already passed.
Another of your faults is what I’d like to call the ‘banter dialogue’. In a story, you should try not to fall into the trap of writing like this:

“Yes, but let’s not worry about that,” he took a breath. “Hear me out, please.”

“All right,” she replied, watching as his face dropped its usual mask of disdain.

“I want you to reconsider His Majesty’s offer of marriage,” he said softly. “Your husband has been dead for ten years. It is time for you to move on.”

While you may find this kind of dialogue more descriptive, it disturbs the flow of the conversation badly.
As for characterization, I’d say that I find Jade’s attitude a little strange. Yes, I understand that he is more caring than he looks, but he still sounds far too nice for his usual attitude. Perhaps this is simply because he is already dead (Oh dear, a spoiler!), so I won’t comment too much on that. I do not know enough about Nephry to say if she is in character, but I think you made her fairly consistent throughout the story, so this is good for you.
I like the way you wrapped up the story with Peony lifting Jade’s glasses from the fireplace. It is a fitting end, and a touching one too. I also had no problems understanding your story from the beginning until the end, your grammar and spelling were excellent, and your style was consistent throughout the story.

I’d say this deserves an 8/10.

Oh my.

I love this piece.
It's very well written, and the revelation of Jade's death at the ending gives it an unexpected twist. (I still gawk at the thought of the Colonel dying. He seems so.. immortal, somehow.)
It's a nice, albeit a little , having Jade leave his glasses on the mantle.

Very well done.
Keep it up :D

NO JADE! XD Nice. Omg, Jade came to his sister in spirit... omg... HOW CAN YOU KILL JADE! >-< ...Jade... Jade... XD lolz Okay, I'm done. This was totally awesome. Type more like this please! ^.^

I love it! To me, it's indearing that Jade died protecting Anise and that he came back to tell Nephry to find happiness between her and Peony. Good job!

holy shit that was freaky! if i were nephry i'll freak out LOL anyway that's sad jade died! BUT this is a great fic! keep up the good work!

Oh man... oh man oh man oh man. This was good. It made me really think... So much creativity and you were still able to keep the characters pure. Wonderfully touching!

The fic was simply beautiful. It somewhat concerns me, though, that although the story itself was very sad, I can feel nothing right now but extreme happiness for the hints of Jade/Anise you threw in. :P

Great job~ I'll be looking forward to whatever else you decide to write.