please make it longer =)

anou...its cute

Very good. Can't wait for more! :)

Keep going! Love toko fics.

Being honest; I didn't even read the whole chapter.
English is my second language and all the spelling mistakes are really confusing for me.

Like:
...head with it to hard. ('To' should be written with dubble 'o'.)
...packing there camping equipment on to Apaa. (It's not 'there' but 'their'. You also spelled Appa wrong in this sentence.)
“Where you going?” (It should be "Where ARE you going?")

I think you could have prevented a lot of spelling errors by just reading the story through while watching the spelling.
Small mistakes can annoy the heck out of some people.

I like the story idea through, just watch your spelling.
Good luck!

GhostCookie

very good story, i just found it. Very ic too, thopugh your grammar and spelling could use some work. stay in one tense, eathier third person (he/she) or first (I). also visually spellcheck 'on tide-up' should be 'one tied up'. but can't wait to read more =)

Zuko needs to think up of better come back lines. "Your blind"!?
Anyways, the fan fic is great. Update soon.

very very nice! keep up the good writing! i eagerly await your next chapter!

It's got potential, but you could improve it tons by sticking to one kind of narrator. Within one POV, you switch from first to third person and that's a bit confusing. I personally like third person narrators better, cause you can get into everyone's POV without necessarily saying so (Zuko's POV, Toph's POV or whatever), but that's up to you.

This is such an awesome story! Unexpected, but that's why it's awesome! I just wish I could have Zuko for myself!

keep up the good work!

Yey! An update! I must say, it was better than your other chapters. You misused a couple of words, but other than that I think you did a good job. If it helps any, try and read the chapter outloud. That way you can hear you mistakes.
Happy belated birthday!
So just keep writing and you'll get better over time.
By the way, my third instalment to Love, Honor and Iroh is up. So when you get a chance, read it.

Oh gods, I love this story! UPDATE AS SOON AS HUMANLY POSSIBLE! I LOVE THIS STORY!

Nice story! Keep writing!

The second chapter is as good as the first and maybe even better. Keep coming with more chapters!!

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