|Reviews for SNL, a digital short|
| ultimate mayhem 3/18/13 . chapter 31
Hey could you do one of Nanoha, Fate, and Hayate playing Borderlands or forming a band?
| vertuila 9/30/12 . chapter 27
I love that she kept her panties on as she masturbated. Even she didn't have an orgasm, it was deeply arousing to learn about her young body releasing such copious amounts of lubrication. It was a delicious read, thank you:)
| Lu 9/9/12 . chapter 21
You are one of the best fanfiction writers I've ever seen and by the way. I checked JunkedCat's account, but I couldn't the story Landscaper!Fate. Did JunkedCat delete it?
| mllhild 12/7/11 . chapter 30
i liked your story, but one thing is bothering me. Why is Vivio incapable of finding a job?
First she could have joined the TSAB forces like her parents and her friends, in fact during the StrikerS series was stated that her magic power was high,not abnormal like Nanoha, Fate and Hayate but still enough to be at least a ground mage.
Secondary the infinite library would have also an option, she certainly would have gotten at least a low post, even if she had to relay on Yuuno's recommendation.
Third, her grandparents on earth where around the 60s at this time so she could take over the restaurant.
Now to undermine my on affirmations:
Was the restaurant still there?
Maybe she grown hatred towards the military and TSAB?
Other question in my mind is. Has she stopped to learn magic because otherwise see could have make quite the money upon earth.
My suggestion would be for a pos-war scenario where Nanoha and Co. died and Vivio did end in an early stage of here live on an not administrated planet so not being able to learn magic and to start by selling herself. This would give it a bit more of sad background and not the pretty appearance of Mid-Childa in your mind while reading the story. But this would force the story to be longer so maybe it wasn't your interest.
Another option is to make it an alternative version of Shadowerse from RadiantBeam and put Vivio as traitor to the TSAB after blowing out classified information she received from Lutecia. So she would have to flee and end up on her own. There could the Story run like you did write it with the small difference that Vivio would be using a false name to fool the TSAB.
I hope that you liked it.
Ah and sorry for the bad English since it isn't my mother language.
With respect for all the entertaining Storys you did write.
André Milani-Martin "mllhild"
| gamingbookworm 10/25/11 . chapter 1
rofl, oh the innuendo.
| Kitsune-Kuu 8/6/11 . chapter 1
Omg that was so miss leading!
| Karsten69 7/5/11 . chapter 8
the proper way to deal with this issue is to tell them it's either that or any other meal. my mother did that way towards my brother and he turned out okay. encourage the notion in their mind that they won't get any food if they get this snack. personally if I'm ever on such a tight budget, I'd make truth of it, and actually enforce it. after a while, 2 days at most, they will begin to reconsider. that might seem evil, but it builds discipline, (something that is lacking nowadays) they won't question things when I says it is so. I'll also teach them good manners, etiquette.
anyway, sorry for the rant, and good fic.
| Sakura cc 10/1/10 . chapter 28
HAHAHA poor Nanoha! I can say that happened to me as well but i forgot what i bit too hard... it was days after i figured it WAS indeed a part of my tooth i lost XD btw, sounds like very hot sex, i've alays wanted to try it with nutella...
| Sakura cc 10/1/10 . chapter 20
ROFL XD That's sucha a romantic... first kiss... experience... i guess... I mean bondage, dim lighs (or lack there off), possible EXOTIC odors, not to mention the exotic dinner as well XD
| Sakura cc 10/1/10 . chapter 18
Uhaaaa i swear my eyes were watering when i rad this and it was so shoooort .
| SharinganUserX 9/1/10 . chapter 31
loved every single one
| SharinganUserX 8/31/10 . chapter 14
I wanted to review after I read all of them, but this one was just so perfect & WAFFy, I had to do it .. you are an awesome MSLN & NanoFate writer, I plan to read all of your MSLN fics
| Jokulhaup 4/24/10 . chapter 28
Heh, I chipped one of my molars in my sleep once. Maybe I was clenching them too hard. Unlike Nanoha, however, it actually hurt a bit for me, needed to go see a dentist. Cute story, made me flashback.
| Jokulhaup 4/24/10 . chapter 10
Fiery Love Love Brainwashing at its finest. P
| DragonSword35d 2/22/10 . chapter 31
I admit that the very notion of this pairing is rather strange. However, I am a rather firm believer in the thought that ANYTHING can be plausible if done right. And this, I am pleased to say, was done right. At least to start with. I would very much like to see this thought expanded on. But, I shall, as always, leave it up to you. In the mean time, I think that I shall look in to this F91 person. Do continue writing. Your work is, as always, rather enjoyable.