Reviews for XMen: Children of X Book I

Reviews For: XMen: Children of X Book I

Broken Sword of the Morning 2007-11-04 ch 3,	abuseHey, another good chapter. In fact, this was better than the last one - well written, and with a nice plot. In fact, I think I like your plot to "The X Impulse" (Episode 2) somewhat better than the actual episode. "The X Impulse" portrayed Lance as a much worse character than he is later in the show - and for the way he acted, there was no way Kitty would end up with him later. You, however, have toned it down slightly - by making Lance more apologetic and a bit nicer. I hope this story just keeps getting better. I look forward to its next installment.
Broken Sword of the Morning 2007-11-04 ch 2,	abuseThere. Little button clicked. This is an interesting idea for a story, and one you seem to be developing remarkably well. The plot is good, and the grammar mistakes are minor - they mostly have to do with punctuation. The most common of these is leaving out the commas where they belong - but that's easily remedied. I particularly liked Magneto's dialogue, succinct as it was. Even with those few words, you were able to present him well. Another thing I would suggest is making partitions clearer - such as with a line, or an asterisk. I am intrigued as to how this story will continue. Hope to see more coming soon.
DSkillz 2007-08-20 ch 3,	abuseHey, what up, CosmicPhoenix. I usually don't review a fic until it's finished, but I promised I'd review your story, so here goes. Sorry about getting to it so late. I'm liking how you're incorporating elements from every form of X-Men media into your story almost seemlessly. I like to think I'm pretty knowledgeable all things X-Men (including the comics), but I'm not sure I remember this particular conversation between Charles and Eric. Did you write it out yourself? Good job if you did. Good to see Wanda's with the Brotherhood from the jump. I liked the antagonism she and her father had in the cartoon; too bad the writers of the 'toon didn't take that storyline anywhere. And I see you've put Angel, Iceman, and Psylocke on the original team here. I really want to see where you go with Psylocke's story. Oh, and here's some comic book backstory on some characters that might be helpful: Wanda and Pietro were both resentful of Magneto blackmailing them into joining the Brotherhood, but this was before they knew he was their father and vice versa. Magneto and Mystique have barely even met in the comics, not of dislike for each other, but because they are both too used to being the leader. In fact, they both led the Brotherhood at different times. Let's just say the relationship between Mystique and Destiny was more than friendly. And Colossus was briefly one of Magneto's Acolytes in the comics, when he was disillusioned with being an X-Man. I really hoped I helped you out with all this. Now, get going on the story, girl! It's been a month and a half since the last chapter.
Wolf55 2007-08-10 ch 3,	abuseI really like the way this story is going, it flows well, except that you need some kind of divider when who switch scenes, I sometime had to go back and read some of it twice to figure out where I was, I always liked the X-men: Evolution, even if they did rewite some of the characters beginings, but you write well, keep it up.
boboo3 2007-07-08 ch 3,	abuseWhat do you know clicking the review button did make me happy :) Pretty much the same as the last chapter, but again I like the creative liberties you took, Bobby being there. Kitty being introduced to Kurt, stuff like that. I will be sure to continue reading the story
boboo3 2007-07-08 ch 2,	abuseI think the story is great, but I have one problem with it. It is sticking kind of close to Evolution. Otherwise it is great, I noticed some creative liberties but otherwise, this chapter was a lot like the episode it paralells. How you write it however is extremely good and keeps me interested in the story.
boboo3 2007-07-08 ch 1,	abuseI finally got to reading the story Phoenix :D It is pretty good, the only thing I would worry about is length, but I am not one to talk my early chapters to serious stories are always shorter than the later ones. You have Charlie and Eric's characters spot on though. I will be sure to review every chapter, so now on to chapter 2.
Evil lobster girl 2007-07-07 ch 3,	abuseBest chapter yet. Well Lance and Kitty are favourites of mine so I was bound to think that. Still some great dialouge and I loved the twists on the original story. The way Lance had her meet him for a different, slightly better, reason. You managed to keep to the storyline and keep it interesting. Not an easy thing to do. I'am uber impressed. Please update some. And may I put in a request for more Lancitty. You could have them develop a more well rounded relationship than the show had time for. Anyway it was great.
Bushido Brown1236 2007-06-19 ch 1,	abuseSorry this took so long, but anyway you're story is off to a great start keep it up, sorry i can't say morer but I've gotta go see ya.
Jessie07 2007-06-17 ch 2,	abuseGreat story!! I really like this story a lot so please update soon!!
howlerdrode 2007-06-16 ch 1,	abuseIs this story going to be from the perspective of Magneto? that will make for an interesting read. Update soon. I look forward to seeing more.
Evil lobster girl 2007-06-16 ch 1,	abuseI'am definitely entralled. Really want to know what was going on between Charles and Eric. Post soon! Seriously I want to know now. Please.
Jessie07 2007-06-16 ch 1,	abuseCool so far! Keep up the good work!

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