| Reviews for The Saros Cycle |
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Lady Eve 12/10/08 . chapter 1This was a wonderful view into Jacob. He is my favorite Twilight Series character and you did him justice. I don't think this piece is wordy for Jacob at all. As I read this piece, I felt like I could actually see and feel what he was going through. Your words flowed smoothly and your descriptions of setting and place took me to rainy Forks. Thank you for writing a good fic. |
omgiwantthisaccounttogoaway 8/21/08 . chapter 1even though im team edward, im a jacob sympathizer. |
Sam Bauman 9/23/07 . chapter 1 The Saros Cycle. Gods, what a beautiful metaphor. |
wendilyn 9/8/07 . chapter 1HI! Well, this is not my favorite of your fics, but I liked it. It just seems a bit rough-run on sentences, fragments, and it felt wordy, especially for Jacob. There was some really great imagery. I also really liked how you developed Jake's thoughts while he tried to write the letter, and tied in his sentence fragments from Eclipse. :) |
Lily 7/5/07 . chapter 1 That is so good! You made that dull ache in my chest appear again-it takes a skilled writer to make the readers emotions so strong. There is only one aspect that is confusing. Who is the black-haired vampire, and does Jacob actually rescue Bella from him? |
Teak 6/18/07 . chapter 1 I liked your take on "the letter". I liked how you incorporated the scene around the storm. I liked how Jacob now realized why Bella wanted to find the meadow. Poor Jacob. |
zecchinos 6/17/07 . chapter 1This story really reminds me of one I read about a month ago. It was the same concept, Jacob writing the note and running to get out his anger. They seem to have several similar ideas. Really similar ideas. *Jacon is angry at the situation and runs *Jacob circles Bella's house and smells vampire *There is an extended "If" section, where he is thinking what could have happened differently. *The responses to the parts of the letter are the same, just mixed to go in a different order. *The ink of the pen splatters, representing the character's understanding of the situation in his life right now. It's really similar to that other story. It's the same title. Are you the same author? Did you just revise the fic? I hope you saved a copy of the old one because it was better. |
Alix.Natalie 6/17/07 . chapter 1This is very well written; very descriptive, but, sadly, that is not a surprise...(lets out a sigh...) I think your idea of making it all into a collection of one shots is perfect as long as your other one-shots retain the same quality of writting as "The Saros Cylce" does. Keep posting! |
visitor 6/17/07 . chapter 1 Hm this story was interestig but it seems I have read it somewhere before? The wording just doesn't seem to be Jacob. I don't know it is just ok I guess. |
Vitoria 6/17/07 . chapter 1 It was great! I loved your writing and it was the first time that i have felt like this was the actual character, not an impersonation. It felt like it was actually Jacob and now i feel even more bad for him. I think that you're really talented. Torie |
Ayo 6/17/07 . chapter 1 I liked this piece alot, you got Jake's perspective down very well in my opinion. you will write more, correct? i hope so! |
Hikari 6/17/07 . chapter 1 ah! i love it i see it so clearly way to go |
tweedledeela 6/17/07 . chapter 1This story...is...amazing. You are amazing. I loved the whole thing, but I especially liked the way you described Jacob as the moon revolving around Bella's world. That was such an amazing way to describe it, and it was completely heart-wrenching. Great I think you did a really good job of getting into jacobs mind, it was very believable, and the whole thing just completely made me want to give him a big hug! Great job! You amaze me! |
LindaRoo 6/17/07 . chapter 1Very cool! I'm impressed with your writing talent! Way to go. This is so angsty and thoughtful. I love the meadow! |
Secretly Rotten 6/17/07 . chapter 1aww that was so sad but so darn good! i love it! and i usually dont like sad stuff but i really do like this! update soon! |