I think you are way over thinking this. As a professional writer i advise you to pay attention to your writing. You really confused me by what you wrote. You have a good story but you need to be able to express your idea in a different way. I think you can improve on that. Use proper grammer. You seem to use alot of wordiness. Try explaining things a little bit more thourghly. You are writing a story here so add more details. And good job, i like you story

XD wow this story is awesome!
I'm still laughing at this part: "Look Arancarr. You do NOT Cero my classmates!"

No!1
*crys for grimmjow*
I love both grimmjow 'and' ulquiorra...T_T *Okay..I have to choose one or thee other...

lol?! "aren't I generous?"- Ulquiorra. Yes he is very generous> XD

lol this is really good, but ulquiorra is still really ooc. although maybe its just that hanging around this different crowd he doesnt have to deal with people always trying to psychologically attack him, and its actually ok to do somethin with your face.

*bursts out laughing* lol silly arrancars - learn about human social rules before you come waltzing into their world xD lol i love this and YAY for putting nel in- she is one of my favorite characters. i hope you have ichi and nel together ^o^

wow.. i LIKE it! its cool and awesome. although sometimes ulquiorra seems a little bit ooc (not his personality, just his expressions)

It's so cute! Update soon ^^ :D

Great Writing! I had just thought of Orihime/Ulq as a pairing and I found your story.

Loved it!

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well i love to know what happend about Ulquiorra with Hitsugaya and Matsumoto put in one room with orihime in the middle

Gosh, this chapter was quite sad. But I like the UlquHime in it.

Hmm. Nice idea, and you got this down alright, despite your not reading the manga. Still, I think it's a bit hard to read. You can clear up many mistakes and misunderstandings if you space things out and organize them into paragraphs.

-Jerkess