Wah, I haven't read Acid Tokyo yet-though I already know what happens, of course.

yeah. It was horrifying.

Excelently written, very powerful and all around well worded, I think Kurogane's thoughts and emotions were written out almost exactly! (faved)

Well, I don't think Kurogane was as you depicted him... I'm fairly sure he was in his right of mind the whole time, and completely aware of everything going on, but it was a good story aside from that... I also don't feel that we've learned enough about clone Syaoran and the effect Acid Tokyo had on the others in regard to the poor kid, and thus feel that assuming Kurogane sees Syaoran, or even did at the time, as a mere soulless monster, is kind of jumping the gun, since they didn't go over a hundred chapters of the manga with the poor boy to only disregard him as a monster. Fay lost his eye because he believed in Syaoran, or at least had enough faith or whatever you want to call it, to try to keep him around as himself. Still, good story- nice writing style.

I can vividly imagine every gruesome, sickening detail of your story... the description is flawless and the feeling of horror and dread behind this is amazingly accurate to that of the manga. Although it was about the darkest volume in the series, don't be discouraged because this was really well written.