Reviews for Some Unexpected News

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Skipper713 2008-05-09 ch 15,	abuseOK. First of all, I have read it all. And I liked it. BUT (and this is a big but. :God I just realized how weird that sounds, lol:) you need to work on some things. Firstly, Kari pregnant at 14? 18 would have been more appropriate. TK and Kari are the kind of level-headed people who would have NOT had sex without protection, AND planning. They would either wait 'till they were married OR make sure there was no chance of getting pregnant. (ex. Condom, Birth control) If Kari and TK did have sex without protection of some sort, they wouldn't take it that fast. Before sex there is foreplay, kissing, etc. (:people pointing: "HENTAI") Kari would not let TK have sex with her in like two seconds after saying "Prove it", and TK would not pressure her into it. Secondly, you cannot find out you are preganat that quick! It takes a month, or AT LEAST a few weeks. And why would Kari go to Mimi? What about Yolei (best friend) or Sora? Thirdly, Tai and Matt's reactions were so off. I mean both of them are so protective of their little siblings, they would have a COW! Tai wouldn't even tell the difference between how got Kari pregnant. The thing is, SOMEONE GOT KARI PREGNANT! Regardless, if it was his best friend in the world, Tai would beat the living sh*t out of them. Her parents reactions were also "Woah". They are either stupid, or don't care about their kids. Next, if Tai made such a big deal about Kari getting pregnant. He would not have the same thing happen to him. HE IS NOT STUPID! There are also a few plot holes that need attention. ex. Tai's accident. Either way, do not take this as a flame at ALL! I am quite taken with this story, and even though it is extremely OOC and unbelievable, I am quite hooked. The best thing ever would for you to rewrite this, or revise it, clearing up some of the things I mentioned (as well as others). I do enjoy this story, so I urge you to revise it, to make it EVEN better! So, it needs some work (but what stories don't?) but nonetheless it is pretty great. You can quote that, lol. I am NOT an expert, but these are just some things I have picked up on over the years. Please don't hate me! :Ducks flying objects: I still Love this story. Please continue! WOOT! :]
Soldiermon 2008-05-09 ch 15,	abusenot that i care but y the hell does every 1 always make the baby a girl!! eye would for once just want to c a boy. sorry if i sounded rude. good story
YukiGaAruAi 0 CourageousLov... 2008-05-08 ch 15,	abuseawesone but it still seems a bit rushed ^_^
Depthmon 2008-05-08 ch 15,	abuseAh sweet chap!
Crystal Persian 2008-05-08 ch 15,	abuseTHIS CHAPTER WAS AWSOME! I'm really happy they had a girl! I hope TK proposes soon! Great work as always!
Paulagirl 2008-05-07 ch 14,	abuseEek! I've been reading this story for awhile, and I must say: you know how to build suspense. Although I've missed the Meaningless chat of the online thing [I was hoping that davis and yolei would send love letters to eachother :3] But, at least it keeps the story moving. Lol, that would be so funny if Kari was having not one, but triplets! Poor T.K.
OathkeeperRiku07 2008-05-05 ch 14,	abuseThis was a great story, can't wait for the next chapter.
Soldiermon 2008-05-04 ch 14,	abusegood chapter wonder wat'll hapen newt
PHSDRUMLINE1210 2008-05-04 ch 14,	abuseAnother Awesome Chapter
WritingQueen690 2008-05-04 ch 14,	abuseYay cliffhangers! The babies finaly came! I hope one of the babies name is Tyler like on the poll cause it kind of sounds like Tai. Just an idea, it's your story. Can't wait til you update, WritingQueen
MysteriousStranger08 2008-05-04 ch 14,	abuseCliffy cliffy cliffy, this story rocks! (I like Double Oreos by the way)
YukiGaAruAi 0 CourageousLov... 2008-05-03 ch 14,	abusethat was good but the naming of the twins seemed a bit rushed and tai can make more than soup and ramen you forgot eggs (the digimon movie)
Depthmon 2008-05-03 ch 14,	abusesweet
Crystal Persian 2008-05-03 ch 14,	abuseWoah... Didn't expect Sora to go in labor before Kari! Good choice for the twins names! Can't wait for the next chapter!
Soldiermon 2008-05-03 ch 13,	abusegood chapter wens the next 1

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