I don't like it *sits in corner with a shaking bottom lip*
I mean, I love the way you write - it's beautiful, but for all it's implications ... I can't bring myself to like it. And your "Author's Note" does bare the question - what IF Ichigo dies, surely Kubo-san would find a way to make them meet again. Surely?

Anyway, back to the implications - I just can't bring myself to believe that there's even the slightest posibility that Ichigo could be defeated. Not even including the fact that a cowardly, unjustifiably idiotic ** was the cause of his death but merely the fact that he could die at all. It kinda weirds me out. That aside -and as I said before- you have a wonderful writing style, it's expressive and delicate but not so that you'd potray someone like Ichigo in the wrong light.
And though I don't like the fact that he actually died -cause really? What die-hard Bleach fan would like THAT?- I rather did enjoy the first 2 thirds of this story. You made it seem like he'd been fixing her from day one and she only gets it completely when she's about to be ripped anew.

Okay, I think that's enough from me ne? But! In case I didn't make myself completely clear, I did love this fic - for the most part :o) and I hope that's enough ...

Ja ne

omg u made me cry
~sniff sniff~
that was so beautiful
but hopefully that doesnt happen
anyways KEEP WRITING! ur really good!
- ChEsE

wow sad but very well done ^_^

Wow !! Great Discription !!
It's like you could imagine or mabye feel it happening right here , right now ~!

Keep up the good work!

Wow, this is so much better than the car crash songfic that I wrote. Good job.

How depressing, but I still like it. Haha.

- SerenityxAngel.

bam. i'm so heart-broken. ouch. it's s nice story though. just hate the ending. ehe!

I'm going to go cry now.

That was absolutely beautiful! It was an innocent play between two people, when suddenly the unthinkable happens. I still can't belive he would die though. The thought makes me want to cry! It was an amazing oneshot and I hope you continue to write!
Tenfold Defiance

OMG, I'm seriously crying right now. While I was reading, I was thinking. It's so horrible that things like these happen. And you can never understand the pain that Rukia felt seeing that unless you have actually seen it yourself. It's hard, when you think about it. How horrible it must be. There are those out there who have seen loved ones die before their eyes, and their pain is just, unbelievable.

I could feel Rukia's pain throughout this story. Great descriptions. You're an amazing writer.

*sniffs*

Aw, that was so sad! Beautiful discriptions, very nice one-shot.

that was so cool i loved the part where you said the world doesnt stop for anyone its just keeps on going

Wonderful description, skillfully played out.

One question... Why is it only the driver and Rukia noticed a bloody mass in the middle of the street? I mean really, someone would've saw it and called 911! (Or whatever it is in Japan.)
Other then that it was simply beautiful.

D: that's so depressing and sad ><
but i liked it ^-^ so i give it an A+ xD

love love,
tiffy

*cries*

Wow. and ou think my writing is beautiful? Girl, you are amazing. I love the interaction between these two, the way Rukia sees Kaien in Ichigo and the gentleness we all know is in Ichigo but we hardly see :)
Thank you for this...

Keep it up!

Laura