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Reviews For: Murder on Black Road

Trill The Mass Murderer
2007-11-04
ch 12,
abuseomg this is so good.

i friggin love the plum/scarlet relationship!

good job!!
Trill The Mass Murderer
2007-06-25
ch 8,
abuseomg! i love your scarlet/plum realtionship! this is getting interesting please continue!!
lb1230
2007-06-21
ch 5,
abuseThis is quite fun! The narrative has a nice swing and the characterization of the two policemen through dialogue is quite nice. The other characters would, I feel, benefit from more varied "voices," especially as you don't have much expository prose. De gustibus non disputandum est, but I think a little more ambient detail could work as well.

Beyond that, do you have a reason for saying "the record keeper of England" and not "Somerset House"? I think the latter might sound a bit more professional, but that's a small tweak.

I look forward to seeing whodunit!
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