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| Trill The Mass Murderer 2007-11-04 ch 12, | abuseomg this is so good. i friggin love the plum/scarlet relationship! good job!! |
| Trill The Mass Murderer 2007-06-25 ch 8, | abuseomg! i love your scarlet/plum realtionship! this is getting interesting please continue!! |
| lb1230 2007-06-21 ch 5, | abuseThis is quite fun! The narrative has a nice swing and the characterization of the two policemen through dialogue is quite nice. The other characters would, I feel, benefit from more varied "voices," especially as you don't have much expository prose. De gustibus non disputandum est, but I think a little more ambient detail could work as well. Beyond that, do you have a reason for saying "the record keeper of England" and not "Somerset House"? I think the latter might sound a bit more professional, but that's a small tweak. I look forward to seeing whodunit! |