Reviews for Crumbling Salvation

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DarkAngel10003 2008-07-07 ch 1,	abusethat was really amamzing! This was the first one ive read from Ryuks POV and it just blew my mind, amazing!
Star Jinin 2008-05-30 ch 1,	abuseWow! Amazing! Ryuk is portrayed perfectly! I can understand what he says about it too. Except I don't think he's that smart to think that deep...oh well, it was pretty amazing. I loved how you said that humans needed somthing to believe in and all that stuff about judgement.
the sadistic homicidal chil... 2008-04-19 ch 1,	abuseJustice is rarely black and white. Many times, justice isn't given. People turn to a saviour, regardless of who it may be, and rejoice in the belief that this saviour will cease their ails. I loved that you did this from Ryuk's perspective. He was so indifferent to the whole thing. XD Particularly on this part, ". . .Blah fucking blah, Ryuk wants an apple. He thinks that humans believe in some pretty dumb things. . ." That made me laugh so fucking hard. XD I love it! Perfection! X3
Olynara Sedai 2008-03-18 ch 1,	abuseThat was darkly beautiful. I have a "love concept" obsession, so it's that that I have to mention first (I'll get to the rest, though. I write long reviews when I like something). The way Ryuk said he loved Light was fitting with his godly detachment. It was definite but meaningless, like humans themselves, and just thrown in, happening to fit so well. It was a symbol that Ryuk used to familiarise the two of them, along with Savior, and Something Else. I'm glad you mentioned that you put in the capitals on purpose, because while the first few times seemed accidental, if fit better and better as the story went along (or more likely my mind fit it better), and seemed to have a rhythmic feel to it, much like the old poems you mentioned. I loved your portrayel of Light; of all the things he was, he was never seen as a dreamer in the anime and manga, and most especially the movie (though that's really it's own being, and shouldn't be put with the other two. But the point is Light is made to seem evil in the movies because movies promoting the bad guys blantently don't go well). Anyway, he is always the straightlaced one, at most calling himself "pure." But it would take a daydreamer, or a poet, to be able to imagine a pure world, or that they could achieve it. (And since the best prodigies and poets invariably die young, his fate was more or less set that way...) It fits remarkably well, even better since he probably never saw it in himself. Repeating things like "he was a god, he knew how to kill," added to the feeling of the story, a sort of distancing of Ryuk from humans. I totally agree with your view of death note, since I hold that belief in general any way (always makes things easier to accept grin). But at the end of the manga, it adds something; a sort of 'life and death are meaningless to the dead, but everything to the living.' Light isn't a concious being, so he obviously couldn't care about what people thought about him. But an entire cult of people worship him, because he killed others, and preserved their own lives. I'm not explaining myself very well, but I'm wondering out loud over whether the end is more than just about 'justice' but life itself. I'm not sure yet... back to reviewing... The last two... no, the last line itself, is perfect. It sums up everything in seven words (seven sins... christian sounding prayers... ha ha). And no abbreviation, which makes it more formal, more feelings. The more I look into this, the better it is (If I'm looking too deep, sorry, my English teacher is nuts). Well, that's all for now, yours till the sun takes it's last dip below the horizon; Olynara Sedai
SunMoonAndSpoon 2008-03-15 ch 1,	abuseThis was certainly an interesting piece. I'm not quite sure how I feel about it. In some ways, it was brilliant. I think you got Ryuk's thoughts and beliefs across quite accurately, and the writing itself was, you're right, musical. And I loved the 'he is something else' bits. That sounded good, and it was apt. However, there were times when it was also confusing and incoherent. You wrote it a while ago, so I'm certainly not blaming you or anything, but your tenses were really inconsistent--you kept switching, and even if that was intentional, it didn't quite work. Also, I think you should have limited the capitalized words--it has more impact if you do it less. 'This Is Not Justice' had a major impact, so things like that... Anyway over all, great job. I really did enjoy this story, and the thoughts behind it were very smart and well-considered. It just had some small flaws. I love your writing.
samiseriouslyam 2008-03-02 ch 1,	abuseAwesome. Just plain Awesome.
bloodchaos 2008-01-29 ch 1,	abuseI never realized until you wrote it, but if Ryuk had written Near's name in the Death Note, he himself would have died as well! I love the way you portrayed Ryuk's feelings for Light, indeed, Ryuk did love him. You are brilliant!
Claude le noctambule 2008-01-25 ch 1,	abuseAnd another one...XD; Nice and interessing idea to show us trough a Shinegami's eyes...and...actually, Ryuk's perspective was kind of fascinating. Picturing Light's death as an act of mercy, instead of an ironic illustration of poetic justice or a last trick from a bored Shinigami. It was...neat.^_^ And the idea of Shinegami as creature eating human's beliefs to exist, and how it could explain why they needs to use human's names to kill them... It was interessing and makes so much sense. After all, they're still gods, and gods couldn't live without human beliefs.XD The portrayal of Light as a dreamer and the oposition established by Ryuk between him and the cold pragmatism of Near was awesome by the way. Oh well, thanks for this one...
aaattttackkkkk 2008-01-10 ch 1,	abusem. beautiful!
conspiredfate 2007-09-06 ch 1,	abuseOne of my favorite themes from Death Note: the concept of justice. You wrote it beautifully through Ryuk's eyes on the human world. The first paragraph, starting with: "Ryuk, he was a god." Was amazing. The rest of it did not dissapoint... an excellent work of writing.
Kyuubi madness 2007-08-30 ch 1,	abuseReally good ^^
TrustTheHypocrite 2007-08-28 ch 1,	abuseWow! For some weird reason this reminded me of how humans are like chickens at a pecking slaughter...thing. They see a speck of blood, some flaw on some other chicken, and peck at it. More join in until it's out of control and they are all wounding each other to death. Only with humans, flaws are seen as differing beliefs... But it’s all good fun, ne? (The more I learn about chickens, the more I see how humans must have descended from them, instead of those primates! Definitely makes more sense.) I’ve always liked Ryuk’s personality, and shared some similar thoughts (whether I wanted to or not). And to me that idea of Nothingness always seemed more sensible than the concepts of Heaven and Hell. If there really was a Hell, I would be very, very sad, since I don’t really believe in evil the way many people seem to. I’m too nice probably... Anyways, keep up with your awesome stories! I’d review more, but I’m too lazy.
Lawlz 2007-08-23 ch 1,	abuseAnother story of yours going into my favorites. Do you have any idea of what an amazing writer you are? You should write a book someday. :)
Truth-of-a-Thousand-Lies 2007-08-11 ch 1,	abuseoh my gosh that was so funny. don't ask why. i have a twisted sense of humor. might not be portrayed by the way i write, but if i laughed my head of at Saw 3... i don't think i need to say more. It is a very good story!! Poetic, descriptive, and well...funny. And it meets what I think about Heaven and Hell too. It's all a piece of bullcrap... we are all even in the end. The Gods don't give a fuck about what we do... (At least the death gods) they'll just come and kill when the sand runs out. The rest is a different story. Anyways, since it was so beautifully written, and it was so true, and for once it followed the plot line...im adding you and the story to my favorites. (Oh, and check out my sister's Death Note Poem! I posted it because she hates Fanfiction.)
Mantineus 2007-08-06 ch 1,	abuseGreat story.

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