Not a bad idea, but poor execution. The lack of proper grammar (mismatched verb tenses, punctuation errors, etc) made it extremely difficult to follow what was going on. The characterization needs work and the devil made it far too easy for Stone-he never would give Ezekiel so much information about who he is to find. He only would leave leave hints and clues. Don't stop writing, but consider getting a beta-reader to help you present your ideas more clearly.

Not bad for a fanfic debut!Any chance of a BTVS/Brimtone/GVSE crossover?

The idea isn't bad, but this story needs a lot of work. First of all, there is no excuse for the amount of spelling and grammar errors in this story. There were times when I wondered if the character's first language wasn't English it

was so bad. Second, since when does the Devil outright tell Stone anything? He always hints around at stuff. Next, I find it hard to believe that Buffy would accidentally shoot someone with a crossbow. She's the Slayer and

she's anything but careless.

There's a decent idea here, but it can't dig its way past the bad grammar and plot

holes.

The idea is really great, but the way the idea was shared, is not so good. It really needs work. I noticed some really bad grammer and spelling errors. The character development doesn't match up with what has been established. Satin never told Stone a tham-ding about what was going on. He simply pointed and said "go." and even then, that was being nice. Buffy and Angel weren't quite themselves either.

I suggest a rewrite, with fewer "part X" interupts.

i like, i love, i like , i love. this was a really cute story, keep up the good work.