This was a very well-written, well thought out story. You captured the main elements of the respective WOD Games perfectly. Masterfully done.

I'm still working on finishing it, but I figured as long as I was on (and I usually never have all this nice free time to read and review) that I'd let you know what I was thinking. First off let me say this is (imho) a better story then your other tale (that one with the mercenaries) You have surely expanded and expounded in this story (gee, you think?) It is very impressive to see the scope you are working with, kindred, and wraiths, and garou oh my! On the negative side it feels like you tried to put so much variety into the story that you never paused long enough to develop characters. (I'm through ch. 4 and only marginally feel that I know any of them) It might be worth a rewrite to slow down the pace a bit and expand on the massive cast you have created. Also (and yes this plagues us all) there are still a few spelling errors running loose out there, another editing read-through might serve you well. However it is a pretty interesting story, and I shall definately finish it up. (If nothing else I can't wait for the mage to come whip Renfields backside, the little creep deserves it)I give you two claws up, an amazing effort to include all that you could, well done!