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| Fire Dragon Master 2008-07-06 ch 1,  | abuseIt's the Second Season Opening in which Ranma is doing Tai-Chi. |
| Vi 2008-02-23 ch 2, anon. | abusenice, are you going to bring akane into the story? |
| killroy777 2007-10-31 ch 2, | abuseupdates here too ok? |
| chm01 2007-10-20 ch 2, | abuseUPDATE! |
| Funabisenu 2007-08-10 ch 2, | abusenow this is funny! update soon |
| Vampwriter 2007-07-17 ch 2, | abuseAw... Only two chapter? And I was just getting into it. Please come out with a new chapter soon so I can continue to enjoy it. |
| Raven Marcus 2007-07-03 ch 2, | abuseCOL! Please Write more. The pairings are good even. my favorite would be Aang/Katara and Ranma/Azula. So when Ranma fully masters bendering will he gain the blue fire and lightning. (That WILL mostly likely catch Azula attension) ^_^ |
| ranko lina Inverse 2007-06-25 ch 2, | abusecool. can't wait for more I wonder what the pairing going to be. and does Ranma still have his curse? come on if he does ya MUST have them learn about it. |
| Danimals21 2007-06-24 ch 2, | abuseawesum chapter! luved it! can't wait for the next one! |
| ranma hibiki 2007-06-23 ch 2, | abuseno matter the world, or the FUBAR situation. ranma will always be ranms! =D |
| Gangsta Spanksta 2007-06-22 ch 1, | abuseFirst of all, you have this raw talent. You're good at describing things, and your story telling ability is good. But, you have all sorts of grammatical and punctuation problems. There is comma misuse, run on and incomplete sentences, I saw one place where you use a comma where you should have ended a sentence, luckily you don't have a tense problem. there are formatting issue too. That talent won't be worth much, if you don't learn how to write correctly. |
| ellf 2007-06-21 ch 1, | abuseInteresting idea, but the thing that is turning me off from this fic is the way that you are portraying Ranma's speech. He doesn't say "da" for "the"... you're making him seem dumber than he is. |
| Sean Malloy-1 2007-06-21 ch 2, | abuseGreat chapter, but you need some more decription and you need to check your grammar. Please update soon |
| Nysk 2007-06-21 ch 2, | abuseAnother good chapter |
| Scott Pike 2007-06-21 ch 2, anon. | abuseI like the idea, but you need a beta reader. Things that need to improve are the punctuation and the misspelling of words. Plus that accent you give ranma is kindo of irritating. If you want, I volunteer to be a beta reader for your next chapter and return it with corrections. Keep going with the story. |