I loved this story! It was the right length you had me hooked all the way through. I thought the way Chloe and Jack acted together right up too the end was very fitting to their true characters. The ending was so excellent and so believable to those characters. It flowed well, you seemed to be able to get into the characters so well. The only thing I didn't find brilliant was Audrey, not about her doing the things she did, but just some of the words she said and the way you described her didn't quite feel right for her. This isn't saying she wasn't good, but I just didn't feel that she was as good as the rest of the writing. Overall though I thought this was really good, and is one of my favourite stories on this site. :)

love love love it (:

Wow, wow, wow! This story was AMAZING. You really got the characterizations down.

Totally loved it! Was worth the wait! Hope you write more Chlack stories.

I loved the ending. Are you gonna write a sequel

Just lemme get this out first before I say something constructive... AW! SO CUTE!

Anyway, *ahem* that was a really good story. I love all the twists and unexpected stuff, and I especially like the ending. :-) I hope you keep writing! (And especially Chlack!)

Nice epilogue, Jack and Chloe together at last. About time too!

Greatchapter. What will happen to Audrey? Please update soon

Yay Michelle! I'm glad she uncuffed Audrey before the slapdown. Slapping a helpless woman would be unladylike of her. This would be the second time at least Jack had been betrayed by a woman he loved. It's obvious that he needs Chloe. That woman has no guile and couldn't tell a believable lie if her life depended on it. I like the way you write her by the way. It's hard to write a decent Chloe without turning her into a parody of herself and you do a very good job.

I love it I love it I love it! So awesome. The Michelle smackdown scene was AMAZING. You so very much so rock.

Now give me a happy epilogue!!

Wow I've been reading this all the way through and totally love all the technical stuff in there, which I could never have the dedication to do myself! Also:

Without warning, she reached out and slapped Audrey viciously across the face. “That,” she muttered, “was for Jack.” Another blow landed on Audrey’s cheek, and the blonde staggered. “That was for almost killing my husband.” Michelle took a deep breath and aimed her hand once more across Audrey’s face. “That was because I felt like it, and this…” She balled her fist and made contact with Audrey’s other cheek, “this is for Chloe.”


LOVE THAT SCENE! Can't wait for the rest!

WOW!! Thanks for this. I've spent the better part of reading it and am now waiting for the epilogue. This was just great and let me thank you and compliment you and let you know that you are one of the very few writers, and I am including some of the regulars who write Chloe, to get Chloe's awkwardness, incomplete sentences, and in general stilted speech patterns correct. She's perfectly in character and you can always tell that when you can hear the line being delivered in your head as you read. Everyone was perfectly in character but Chloe was done especially well.

I don't have much chance to read "24" fic and when I do it tends to be Jack and Chloe stuff but this one caught my eye, had to be read and deserved a review.

My compliments also on the fact that you obviously worked ** planning things out and getting the technobabble and government speak correct. Really an amazing effort. You also took the time to grammar check, spell-check, get the verb tenses consistent, give excellent descriptions of the interiors of things and set the right atmosphere for the scenes. Just excellently done all around!!

Thank you so much. This was really great. You should be proud!!

Arianna

YES! GO MICHELLE! :-D Awesome chapter. I love how you flipflopped between the two interrogations and flashbacks and stuff.

YAY! BAD AUDREY! *mwahaha*... Excellent chapter. :-)

Looks like Audrey's in deep doo doo now. Her life as she knew it is pretty much over. Heller must be going through hell. He once sat in while his hippie peacenik son was interrogated at CTU. (Never a fun experience) and now the daughter he hoped would follow in his footsteps has been arrested for treason. I'm glad Chloe's own hell is now over. I knew she wouldn't go home. Chloe never goes home until the job is over. I'm sure she has sympathy for Jack over losing his lover. Underneath that crabby exterior is a heart of gold.