Hello! Here comes your con-crit, nearly two months later...
:^P

So I found next to nothing to con-crit on.

A nitpick:
When one is addressing another, there is a comma between the...um...the 'addressation' and the name. Yes, I know I don't make any sense, so the following are a few exmaples.

"Good luck, Harry!"
"Are you ready, Mr. Potter?"
"Sirius, please."

Then again, you did that ost of the time, so I dunno. However, you asked if this was realistic, and I would have to say no. This may be all a matter of opinion, but Harry? Raped? I just don't see it. I know anyone can, but...eh. Sorry.

As for flow and everything else, I think you have a really good grasp on sentence structure and variety, description, dialogue, et cetera.

Good job!

Very good start. I've not found a fic that takes this approach before-very well thought of and planned out. I really like your writing style-easy to read, interesting, involving and engrossing-much better than my own as you'll agree if you ever read any of my fics. I'm really looking forward to reading the next chapter-you've definitely caught my attention. Please update soon!

Who raped Harry?