this is a really good fanfic, you should update it, cos there aren't that many havoc stories, even though he is one of the best characters in fullmetal. ^_^ Keep up the good work

Yeah! Nice job! I found a couple of things I'd overlooked, but I think you did a nice job! heh

Naw! I love Roy and Havoc! ^^ I want a new laptop (OMG GETTING ONE ON WEDNESDAY)

Love this chapter, just like all the others. :) And I shall be looking foward to more. Must run, going to movies now! Tlk to you later.

Update soon!

Sorry it took so long to reply, I didn't have much time to check my e mail. Once again, of course I'll beta for you! I just need to you to send me the chapter when you're finished with it. I noticed a couple errors, like when you said, "Kenji stood there, with his mouth agape, his blue eyes sparkling with amazement." Instead, you could try something like, "Kenji stood there with his mouth agape, his blue eyes sparkling in amazement." Or you could do something like: "Kenji stood there, mouth agape. His blue eyes sparkled in amazement." Just a couple suggestions. I'd probably do a different color for my corrections and put them in parentheses so you can see whose you like more. So, give me the chapter when you're ready and I'll beta it to the best of my ability! Okay, I think I've taken up enough of your time! ;-)

Woot 'nother chapter. Did Eve grow up in the country? Calling her Mum and Dad Ma and Pa and having like a kabillion siblings (not that I can talk XD)

Looking foward to more!

Jeez, nice cliffie! Oh, and it looks like you might have already gotten a beta. Okay...lots of 'bloody' this's and 'bloody' thats. Oh well! I still love the story, and I hope you can get another chapter out. Heh, alrighty then..

Hey, great story...but the grammer needs a bit of work...Um, if you want...you could send me the chapter and I could beta it for you. I just noticed that there were a lot of run on sentences and the punctuation is a little off...if you don't want me to, it's fine...but I promise I won't change a thing! Just think about it...great story!!

Gasp! Who could it be at the door. Aww Havoc's so noble lol.

Looking foward to more.

Ooh good chapter. The story is progressing nicely, can't wait to see what happens next!

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O, this is getting interesting... I think it's good. You should continue for sure. Update soon please, I really wanna read more fast!! haha XD

AWesome!! I love it! update soon!

How annoying is it that they won't let you have the [] brackets argh!

Yay, you've posted it! I feel bad about having to cancel out on it, so if you need anything, feel free to bug me. But I'm off for the next two weeks on holiday, so maybe not then. XD

Looking foward to seeing where this goes, so good luck!