how about if you write a continuation of inertia I? the story will tell about shinichi and shiho life afterward as a happy family?? I really want to read a story about it, but I can't find one in this fanfiction...and I get too much problems to write it by myself...

Continue this story please...onegai :hope:

i like this chapter.
“I just want you to know,” Shinichi says suddenly, his voice wavering slightly, “that… that spending time with sharks is something that I… that I choose to do. I choose to do it because… I want to.”
i love this part...
wait for another chapter.

Wow...That's...wow...
First, I'm touched by your dedication...(blushes)...and a bit ashamed, now that I'm seeing how late I could be to asnwer...(cough)Well, let's try to correct our past mistake with a review worth of this masterpiece.

Then, I'm glad to see this project being finally embodied into a concrete story. As I've said, countless times, it's pretty hard to find story exploring Shiho's darker side and picturing her as a criminal, not only a victim of the organisation... And when you've mentionned that you were interessed by the idea, and knowing your skills with characterisation, plot and writing, I was delighted by anticipation and cursed with impatience... One of my favorite theme, a terra incognita in the fandom, even the corner of the fandom centred around Ai, and explored by one of the most skilled author of this corner...
Well, now that I've a final result in front of me, and not a little dream(or nightmare, regarding the theme...), I could said...that it was worth to wait, and that my anticipation were not above the reality.

First, I've loved how you've not restrained yourself with characterisation... Now that I remember, you've even warned me on this area, few months...no, years ago... (The stream of times's speed is so high...).
But I'm glad that you've taken the risks... In fact, it's the kind of story that I could have done, myself, when I'm in the mood to explore the most inhuman side of Ai and when I'm trying to create a fictionnal hell worth of the hell angel's daughter.
It's fascinating to see someone chosing an interpretation of my favorite character which is close to mine, regarding to her negative side(usually, when an author picture Ai's evil side, it's for bashing purpose, not to write an interessing story with a different perspective...), but which is not exactly mine, which had its own coloration.

You've made a good job. Your portray of Sherry is fascinating and believable, since it's built on Ai's real personnality, her desire of control, her sadism, the way she's putting a line between her self as Shiho and her self as an efficient tool for the organisation...
We could be scared and digusted by this portrayal of Shiho, but we coudln't dismiss it as OOC...
In fact, it's interessing, instead of portraying her as the banal kind of evil(I. E. the slave of faceless power, hiding her responsability behind the authority of the criminal above her, the eternal slave of totalitarian state and criminal organisation), you've portraiyed her...as someone who is chosing to tastes the forbidden fruit, someone who is not denying her free will but is using it, with a clear mind, using the position of power granted by the syndicate as a tool for her own egoist pleasure...

But behind this dark facade, which is, sorrowfully, everything but a mask, one could still feel some piece of humanity, appearing and vanishing, here and there...
The final line "Because I'm not Shiho Miyano" was specially touching, from this point of view.

I've also loved how you were not afraid to wander near the M rating line... Hehe, sexuality is a fascinating theme, specially when it's mixed with power and pictured in its more primitive and dark side...
Shinichi's despair mixed with Sherry's desire to control her prey in the most intimate way, the curiosity from both side, it was very well done... It was convincing and fascinating...(and hot, but well...)(cough)

Regarding Shinichi's characterisation. I think you've made a good job, we could feel his fiery temper, and how it's crushed, slowly, by the circumstances and the dark scientist pulling the strings.
(By the way, you've made a nice subversion of a cliché... Usually, it doesn't sound believable when the bad guy is explaining her agenda and the organigram of her organisation to the hero, before to kill him... But with your characterisation and the circumstances you've created, we could understand why someone could makes such a thing... A thing which could sound as unrationnal and worth of a scenaristic tool, not an human being... Through your eyes as an author, we could understood how it's pretty human to act in this way, how Shiho needs to show the power behind her and to feel it's recognized and acknolwedged by her prey...)
Your portrayal of the detective was touching and human... We could relate to his despair when he's finally understanding that he had not a single way to escape from his fate, we could relate to him when he's understanding the value of the life he's going to lost, we could relate to him when he's trying to eat some slice of the cake before he couldn't reach it anymore, even if it imply to flirt, litteraly, with the devil...
(It reminds me this Pascal's reviewer, saying that when the mouse is trapped, she would be pretty stupid if she was refusing to eat the slice of cheese which are put her in the trapp...)

So...A powerful story... The one which makes you loves Ai and Conan's situation in canon... After all, once you're understanding how the universe around them could have turn in a different way...
In fact, the story is specially tragic when you're keeping the canon in mind... The Sherry of this alternative universe would never understood the value of the human beings she had destroyed, the Shinichi of the universe would never trully undertsood the tragic situation of his murderer...

No, really, one of your best story... And I would never found the right way to solve my debt with you, as a reader and as the person who get the dedication...
(cough)
(finishing Inertia's translation...Well...well, well, well... I would, I would...Just...Just a matter of times, I swear...)
(cough)

Anyway, thanks you very much. ;)

Hmm, I'm finally back into the DC fandom, and as such, ready to read the two nights that I've missed.

This one... Well, I don't know how to deal with it... In a way, it's kind of off-topic, regarding the main theme putting every stories together in a coherent collection.
Oh, I've seen your purpose, exploring Conan and Ai's relationship in an indirect way... Why not? It's interessing, and when I've tried my own lj challenge, I've think about this kind of idea(stories about the relationship between the three characters chosen, but with one of them being absent...if not two or even the whole group, as long their relationship is still behind the scene, giving its meaning to the story...).
But I dunno, this one looks suited to a gen story, not so much for the 40 nights...
Just my impression but well, how to said it?
It was a good story picturing the partnership between Conan and Akai, and a good exploration of their relationship and how it could evolves when they're becoming closer, through their mutual fight... From this perspective, it was really interessing and I've enjoyed it... but if I judge it with the main theme of the 40 nights in mind, I'm kind of disapointed...

That being said, and as you can guess, I've loved the little undertones about a potential threesome... And, no matters my personnal tastes, it was an interessing idea to picture an intimate relationship between Akai and Jodie, before his meeting with Akemi...
Usually, I'm sceptical with the AkaixJodie couple, I couldn't picture them as anything but friends and partners...but after this story, I would think about the shades of grey between the two alternative(friends or more than friends...).

Oh well, my english is pretty rusty and I'm not sure that I was clear... In any case, a good story, even if I judge it a bit out of place(but as I've said, my personnal opinion, nothing less and nothing more).

I luv this chap. Really meaningful. The way Ai acted was just like her.
I fav this story for this chapter. XD

Very intense.
I especially loved the kiss; it gave me goosebumps.
Update soon!

not THAT was an intresting twist and EPICLY EPIC! sad she killed him, but not all stories have happy endings, ne? that was tragic, but in a good way. at least he died without with first kiss xD can't wait for an update

Wow, that was great! :( sad that Shiho had to kill shinichi, I like more of your light-weighted stuff better lol. It's always nice to read your fictions, thank you for the update :)

m bondage

how do his parents react?
what about ran?

A fascinating alternative to what happened!

So dark, yet so fascinating. The descriptions of his helplessness were wonderful, and her reactions... Beautifully written!

Whoa.

Well, that as eerie yet satisfying chapter. Not to say I fancy the whole binding/bondage-situation in THAT sense. I simply found it intriguing in the sense that this is surely one path that could be taken in the series, given the personalities of each. Somehow, I saw this chapter's Shinichi as being self-centered in the sense that he was concerned of his own safety more than those of others (i.e Ran). It seems to reflect his personality B.C (Before Conan). Then again, it's because only when he had become Conan that the possiblity of friends being targeted arose. Same 'reflection' goes for Shiho before she became Ai. You posed and captured her scientific drive and her "Repression" of her emotions for the sake of unbiased observations. Also, while I was surprised that you killed off Shinichi, it did seem to be the proper way to end chapter.

Some of my favorite lines:
"“Two black-clothed associates among many,” she quipped.“Two amongst a… large murder of crows.”" Mostly because I just learned a couple of days ago that a group of crows is called a 'murder'.

"Like the great detective he was, he investigated her and this unknown experience fervently, forcing himself to continue exploring with lips and tongue until he had a thorough understanding of this physical sensation that had always been an elusive mystery to him." Like I said earlier, it reflects Shinichi's personality very well.

"“Because… I’m not Miyano Shiho.”" Because it left me speechless and heartbroken

Until the next chapter,
~K~(@)

Jesus, that was /amazing/. GOD YOU'RE EPIC NO MATTER WHAT YOU WRITE. 8D