Incredible. I read the second part first, and I almost like it better that way. So heart-wrenching and painful to imagine...tragically detailed and vivid. Simply amazing.

Immaculate in every way.

I hope you update this. I really like how well written it is.

Holy crap! I am so into this.

It's angsty, it's deliciously dark and hopeless. Good god.

Dark indeed and very intricate.

I guess Winry-centric stories are your specialty. I'm a huge EdWin fan, and I think that you have a very clear writing style that conveys your message well. Many authors lack the ability to write and have their reader actually "get" what the author is trying to say. Great grammar and spelling, by the way).

I especially applaud for moving a story along! Its a very delicate process, keeping a reader's interest, as the story might move too slowly (overly-descriptive stories on a FANFICTION website is not a good idea) or too quickly (kiss, sex, babies, WTF?), but you've got it down, lady. Transition from scenes is effective and your writing is delightfully skinny. Which means you cut out the fat that nobody want to read).

A small concern is that she seems more like a character to pity, not to admire or sympathize. I only grieve that she's become a whore to save Ed's soul. The story very successfully makes Winry look like an angel sent to hell, and that image is one that many readers would compare to a hyperactive Cinderella. Well, just an opinion.

You've got talent, though. I enjoy reading your works).

OMG that was awsome! Yuo are a GREAT writer. I'm off to read the others.

up, UP and AWAY!

-SNAP! Tubiume!

INTENSE.

This is very, very good. _

cool story

Wow, that was really good. Poor Winry...

Wow. Just..ju...jus-..Just wow, yeah. Most awesome.

Amazing...I love this... *speechless*

that was horribly well written and an excellent story in a bad way. but yes. you know what i mean.

Very dark, yet so very good. Keep on writing!