Aww... I just read the whole story. I love it!

(((I turned around and glared, "Mr. Black, just what exactly gave you the impression that I wanted you to follow me?"

He gave me puppy dog eyes... gag. "It's just; I think that someone has given you the wrong impression of me..."

"HARRY POTTER!" I yelled.

Harry stood up.

"Doesn't this belong to you?" I hissed, pointing at Sirius.

Harry nodded.

"Well. then. you. should. get. him. out. of. my. classroom. before. I. give. you. both. detention!" I growled out. Sirius didn't seem very deterred by my threat. "With Professor Snape!"

They both went wide eyed.)))

LMAO XD

You said that we could yell at you, so... ARG! ...OK, I'm good. )

aww, i loved how this was all going...

although, if you were getting flames... i can understand why you wanted to write a revision. i'm glad you even want to continue-i'm thankful as well because it is a good story. :)

i'll be checking out the revised version shortly. i really liked this. ;)

Hmm, I know where you're getting at with the whole... "hating-Sirius-because-of-what-he-did-to-Severus-in-the-past"... But I think as a philosophy teacher, she should also know when to 'forgive and forget'... *laughs* I hate the younger Sirius and James because of what they did, but I also think Sirius may have changed through the years. As for him treating Severus the same way even when they're older, I think it's more because he doesn't trust the man who told the 'evil V' about the prophecy which had been the reason James & Lily were killed. Well, if only Sirius knew how heartbroken Severus was when that happened though (Or if he found out how Severus was also protecting Harry, his Godson all along before&after he came & after he died.) things would have been different. *sad* I hope they met in Heaven anyway when they both died an settled things. *giggles*

Gah! Shouldn't she have figured it out already that the person who helpde her was Severus? *frustrated* Although, that would definitely take out all the fun in things... but still... when he said that, "You're going to ruin my reputation..." or something along those line... I think it was fairly obvious. *giggles*

Gah! *again* I would so love for something like this to happen to me... it's insane. But I bet it would be lovely! *dreamy*

I've read a lot Severus Snape romances and I really aprreciate that you made your own OC, but if I may say some of constructive criticism?

You OC isn't mary sue [appreciated]

but: we don't know much about her,

you gone through the action too fast

Snape is far more complicated to have a silly crush on the unconcoius girl, what is more: it would take a long time for him to realise his feelings.

she should do ore than looking at him with puppy eyes,

if he didn't like her subject of philosophy, he should at least argue with her.

and as I said his life was hard, he loved lily to the point of obsession, he was guarded, tormented man, denying himself, and it should be much for her go through his personal barriers. which of course were huge.

I wrote this not to flame you, and fanfiction is training before real writing. I understand it very well, that someone must write some stuff to learn how to write, and I have serious problems with writing, but I read a lot and I can say that in comparison to some briliant fanfics it is rather poor. my advice is to read more, put more tension between characters, more uncertanity, make them deeper. I wish you good luck and it's a shame that people can't write a review which shows weakness of someones fiction. reviews of this kind are helpful. I hope that mine is too. improve and show the world something fabulous :)

i think this story is really good, and i wish you would write more chapters. And on the "revised for you i will" you should write more too, cause that one is also eloquently written. I hope you keep writing more stories about Harry Potter.

Sincerely,

Brooke Heasley

argh!

i have been trying to figure out how it would all be worked out in 18 chapters. And it's late and I kept telling myself, I've gotta see how it ends.

well, nuts!

but seriously... a sign of a good story is one that keeps the reader interested/captivated.

You have a good story here. I look forward to where you will go from here, esp. w/ the last book.

Because really, if Voldy didn't come back in Goblet, how does he really have power at all, or come back.

all sorts of fun questions to answer.

Happy writing.

mk

i love this and i can't wait for the whole revised version.

poor poor sirius

indead the story has been changed around ive become interested is anything changes

Alan rickman rules!

I just wanted you to know how much I am enjoying reading this fic. It is one of the most interesting HP fics I have ever read and I really like Snape/OC fics. Once I started reading this, I couldn’t stop. I have read your other fic as well, the revised version and I think that you should continue to write both fics. I really enjoy the OOCness of this one and like the other one as well. I really enjoy reading both. Whatever you decide I hope you keep writing. I am really enjoying reading your work, so please continue the good work and I hope you update soon.

I liked it and will enjoy reading the revised version. I didn't mind if Snape got alittle OOC sometimes, i thought it made him more loving and made the story sweeter. )