Hey I like this fic a lot! But it looks like you haven't updated in a while... I hope you haven't given up on it already - it's really interesting!

Really good story so far. I'll keep an eye on it.

I really enjoyed the beginning. It catches the readers' attention quite well. There are a few things you can fix though; whenever a different person begins to speak begin a new paragraph, so for example when you write something like this: "“Right, well keep an eye out.” Lara told him cutting him off, Zip smiled and nodded, “Of course.”" You'd want to put Zip replying to her in a new paragraph. Another thing, there are many sentences that start with "she" or "he", try putting some variety between those, that way it wont sound very robotic. A few tweaks here and there and the story would be very good! :) Keep it up!

O! Awesome uptil now. Can't wait for the next chapter. :D:D