Wonderful

Simply beautiful :)

I loved this part:

...“I guess we never really know some people. Or know how they feel about us.”

“That’s true. You for one have no idea.”

Also loved the 12:10, it is tomorrow

a BIG smile on my face after that well done. Loved it.

Ah... the end is sweet!

x chirachi, A GSR writer.

I think I might cry. This was completely, utterly, totally beautiful. I wanted to quote a few of my favourite lines, but I may as well just re-quote the entire story. Your minimalistic style, your keen observation of their relationship, all so realistic. Brilliant.

Your words flow well and you stayed true to the characters. I can really imagine that this is actually how it could have been. Thanks for adding to the mystery...

great job!

can't wait to read more from you!

It might be a halfway decent story but for me, as a reader, it just doesn't work. The story is written in present tense. I haven't been able to figure out why and the story doesn't explain why this style choice was made. The grammar is off, the rules aren't followed in terms of dialog. Example: “I’ll leave you in peace.” He says, Should be: “I’ll leave you in peace,” he says, End example. I just can't get past this style decision to read much of it. Perhaps, the next time you write a piece in first person, you can include an author note explaining that decision in the context of your story? So it will make more sense?

Loved it! Thanks for sharing your preoccupation :) We could all use more of these stories to make it through the summer.

Cheers, Andsowego

aw that was sweet , really good story thank you for sharing :-)