Hi hi!

Not bad~

I'm wondering if the plot might be a bit vague at first hand, since it seems that the main attraction is out, and all we've got are some random 3-A clowns. Hmm.

But nice revival! KEEP GOING, DONTCHA KNOW

Well, even though that this took a month to complete, it was still really good.

I saw two mistakes, though; in the beginning, you must've broken the paragraph too early 'cause it says; '...as the sun rose slowly in' then the next line says 'the sky.' Yes, and the other one was that Konoka has brown hair, not black hair. (justing pointing it out)

^_^ So...I guess that it'll be another month till the next update?...(just kidding!) It doesn't really matter if it takes two weeks, or two months (maybe not the last one...), but update whenever and as soon as you can!

-TzuiAssassian-

heh. Cool stuff. Kidnapping...I did that once :P Good length, Grammar's fine, yeah. Everything's there.

Looking forward to next chapter...I really can't think of an interesting review right now...

Interesting; nicely done :)

Well, Azurestrike, you're first fanfiction didn't turn out too terribly bad! I mean, it was a little confusing with all the events and stuff happening, but it was still interesting enough for me to continue to the end! ^_^

A pardoy of 'Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy' and Negima, huh? This should be a really good story if it turns out well. (In the first part, it was a guy on the computer, but then in Mahora it was a girl? Does that mean he turned from a guy to girl...or something? o.O)

Anyways, good job and please continue!

-TzuiAssassian-

Eyes on the prize, good sir! Who knows what you can pull off with this fic. For a first time your effort is quite nice.

I give a nod to Eternal Longing for being awesome and helping you out.

Hmm... it'd be interesting if the girl was actually from Gensokyo, eh? Ah ah ah...

All pathetic jokes aside, I'm glad to see that you finally posted this thing. The future looks grim for the new character but the potential is virtually limitless depending on how you shape her. At least, I think she's the main character. You never know... things happen.

-Eternal Longing

I doubt this even crossed your mind, but killing off the main character in the second chapter is a great way to ruin both the story and plot immunity.

hm fun stuff. Your grammar and spelling is spot-on.
Can't really say anything about characterization yet, but so far it's working out nicely.

I look forward to your next chapter!