very interesting

No flames for you! They burn Zetsu! D: This was amazing and enrapturing of my curiosity to the fullest! I really like it, Please write more like this~ :D

Read it, I think you have style and I love your descriptions of everything, very vivid.

I kinda feel like this is what horror short stories are usually made of--amazingly detailed but oddly ironic.

And Zetsu is quiet and unmoving, I guess because Hinata's movements and curiosity entertain him so.

I'd love it if there's a sequel to this, or if you make it chaptered story.

Thanks for writing this. Please write more. :)

I've never read a Zetsu/Hina but this was very intersting... I loved they way you described everything... from the thoughts to the imagery. I love the tension you created by paralleling the memory and Hinata. The smile at the end threw me off for a moment... but does the smile mean that he "consumed what [he] yearned for"? Er ...anyway this is diffinetly an instant fav. 8D

i wish there where more stories like this one.

You're an amazing writer. That's all I need to say. This was a short story, but I loved every bit of it. You have so much talent that I envy. Wonderful job on this.

Im very impressed by this short story, this is perhaps one of the few things ive EVER read with such a desire to keep going! It was REALY good! Just so you know i NEVER comment on these sites because i find it pointless but this was to good to pass up!!

ZetsuHina? Wow. Now that is obscure. :D

O.O ...Wow. That was really, really good. That was awesome. Wow. Love to read more of your stuff.

its good just as it is, i think. :)

you're a very good author! i'm enjoying reading your stories! :D


keep it up!! *thumbs up kakashi style*

Wa!...UPDATE! I WANNA READ MORE!!

I thought that was good. Curiosity killed the cat.

? lolololollolololol didnt make much sense but hey since when did zetsuhina make sense?good job you should write humor!

I love it. 'So the bug grew bolder' That phrase sends chills down my spine and leaving me to wonder... Awesome going to my favs.

I liked this story it was differant but interesting too.