Loved the ending. GO DEARKA!

Great story!

Xylia Luna Orion

Ooh, new people! It's great to hear from more fans, it really is. XD

"Maybe he should have listened to Yzak when he told him to cut back on all the strawberry sweets." BWAHAHA. Dearka + strawberries triumphs again, huh? Hysterical. Although... THE STRAWBERRY OBSESSION ISN'T CANON, you know that, right? *sweatdrop* It's just that, you said this was your first fic, so I'm not sure how much you know about them both. As excited as I am because I love the strawberry thing too, I feel sort of guilty every time I'm not sure whether someone knows it was just a fan-created notion. Other people have stressed Dearka's strawberry love, but I blew it WAY out of proportion in loads of my fics. I've already had one person mention to me that she was a little shocked that the strawberry thing didn't show up in the anime after all the hype... So, yeah. *nervous laugh* That's all. Not canon for the series. But carry on with the strawberry love, my good fellow.

I really liked this fic! You write very well, and you have them both in character. Other than a few missing quotation marks at the end of some dialogue, I didn't find anything to critique. And of course I love the whole premise of the story. I mean, Dearka stuck under his bed? Bwahahaha, that's an absolute riot. The ending is damn clever, too. I like it when people come up with terribly cheeky and clever endings. Taunting Yzak like that was definitely something Dearka would do, and it was hysterical.

Keep up the good work, and I hope you can write more again soon! Sorry for the lengthy review - I tend to do that, which you will discover if you continue writing about these two. :P

Ahahahaha! That line was so Dearka! It made me laugh! Your character interplay is good and the characterizations as well. I'm sure Yzak knew Dearka wasnt in a life-threatening situation, otherwise he'd have rushed in and saved him!

Anyway, just one comment: "blond-haired" could be shortened to "blond". :P

I liked your story, being an Yzak x Dearka fan myself. Good work for your first GS fic! :)

- blinkie

haha
i love it.
Dearka truly has no shame
i wonder if hes going to go through with it
nice job

Hey, nice story. Very cute and to the point, although I hope D isn't really getting chubby!! I laughed the first time out loud (you were there), then this time in my head because I'm in a public place. I'll try to post something of my own soon, although I really need to write another chapter of Record... I guess I should put up something about LR...