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| Bella Phantom 2007-06-28 ch 1, | abuseOk people, Ok... Just to put things in the clear, but I've corrected my mistakes in the first chapter... I have a few notes to add to the end of this chapter to clarify things... |
| notwritten 2007-06-26 ch 1, | abuseA very very interesting chapter. |
| yodeladyhoo 2007-06-26 ch 1, | abuseHeh ? Okay, so, how does Violet fit into the Williams' family ? Is she a cousin on Robert's side ? Does Sarah also have a cousin named Toby as well ? Who is Emily and why is it important to the story now ? Who is Ebony and his relationship with Jareth ? The shadow monster took Sarah and Marcus away already ? What happened there ? Questions, questions, questions. I think you need to do some explaining before you can continue onto the next chapter. Until again. |