Oh my god, that was really cute. Unfortunately the paragraphs were a bit long and boring so I skipped them and still understood the story. Which pretty much means that you can either remove them from the story, make them more interesting, or shorten them.

Also, I've seen this type of story before, where the mystery lady ends up being the girl, so I knew it was Hinata all along. Try to hide it a bit more by, maybe Sasuke talking about how wonderful she is and Hinata, being self-consious, would think that she's nothing he was explaining.

Furthermore, I did spot a few grammar errors, but there weren't enough to draw my attention away from your marvelous the story. Please proofread it yourself or, if possible, get someone of a higher literature skill to proofread it for you.

aww cute

lol i knew that would happen. gaww it was so cute! good one!

That was so sweet, I would love if you wrote it from Sasuke's perspective!

KAWAII! And you definately should write it in Sasuke's POV. It'd add to the cuteness! I'm subscribing just in case... LOL.

So sweet, I'm one of those few, at least in my household, who really think Sasuke needs a happy ending and that Hinata is perfect for him. I loved the story!

THE FLUFF...holy cow...this oneshot was so sweet it gave me a toothacheXD Thank you for writing and sharing this and I hope you keep on writing more^^

This had me almost teared up. It's so beautifully written. It was enjoyable to read.

-wipes away tears- God, that was beautiful. Seriously. I wish a guy would do such a thing for me. OH! Totally awesome!

So cute and I so knew that was going to happen heck yeah2 I love it Sasuke is such a sneek! and as for Hinata dang she dumped him twice and she liked him...and he still went after her dang! lol LOVE IT YOUR STORIES ROCK!

Aw so romantic >u<
Awesome oneshot :D

Gosh, this is so sweet

-cries- That was amazing. Beautifully crafted, very detailed; you have wonderful writing abilities.

-adds to faves-

Ah, very cute! I love it.

That's so cute~