Oh no! A cliffhanger! Surely I will perish! Lol jk!:) 'Scuse the melodrama. ;) So, good job and update soon! Or your loving, awesome, and extremely long winded fans will sink into a deep, pathetic state of depression. ^w^ Oh and have you read BLOODHOUND and TERRIER by TP? I don't remember which is first or even if i spelled Terrier right but they're really good.

I find all the back and forth flashbacks confusing.. all the events all seem to be taking place at the same time, but the characters seem always to be in 2 different places at one time. Like the scene when Raoul was with the troops in the Village fighting the hounds, we see him again with Pip in the Chamber.. The transition seem abrupt, even if the chamber scene is a memory flashback, it is hard to reconcile that it is, since the flashbacks and real time events normally don't seem to be related. (Except for those parts with the Phoenix) And cos the flashbacks happen a huge portion of time, it makes huge breaks in the story..

However, I feel that the characters are great! All feel easily relatable :) and they all sound destined for even greater action in your story. It love how you give your characters equal coverage.. All in all, great effort and good story..

Are you going to continue with this story? It seems a waste not to.. every chapter makes me eagerly anticipate for the next..

Oh. My. Word. That was amazing! I can't wait for the next update!

I love your story. But is chapter 14 the last chapter?

Why have you stopped? I know it's been ages since you last updated but we'll forgive you if you just come back!

thats unfair. it's been a year and a half! UPDATE!it's amazing, please!

Your writing is so amazing. Update immediately!

oh im intrigued. havent started reading yet but youve got a good thing going with this idea. very original.

No. Not acceptable. NOT AT ALL ACCEPTABLE!

THAT WAS AN AWFUL CLIFF HANGER! :D It just got REALLY REALLY good (not that the rest wasn't, i read BOTH stories in one day...today) and poor POOR Kally! And Roald! And Pip!

goshdarnit. Please update soon? I'd greatly appreciate it. I'll even giggle like a inspid school girl, and, and write horrible poetry to it and... well, I can't think of anything really cool... :P But hopefully you get my point...

Please update this soon? It's rather nessesary. I've grown rather attached to Ryan... hahaha

Muchas gracias,

Mickeygee

Wow, I just read all of this story in one sitting, and I absolutely love it. I look forward to the next chapter and hope that it will come soon! What a cliffhanger...

Your original characters are so well-written and well-characterized. I love pretty much all the Ryan and Kyrios scenes when they're being witty.

I really hope you update this soon, it's really good! I may have missed something, but what ever happened to the mask that Pip is supposed to wear? When is she supposed to wear it, again? Have her lessons improved?

Please continue to update! While this story is confusing at times, it had piqued my interest. Good job. :)

WHAT? No MORE?

I meant to review each chapter, but then I got caught up...

Love it- excellent imagery, good flow (especially those bits at the beginning of the legend) Beautifully written, and now the plot is-!

Amazing... I love the conflict Pip finds herself in, between her future hopes and then Roald... And of course those poor royals and their problems...

I love all the characters- Kel doesn't seem as Kel-ish as she could be... but I admit that she's not major in this... But ROALD, you have nailed down!

Very intense- plot picking up and stuff tying in...!

Going on...

Hmm... sometimes your transitions are befuddling. Don't know when you're skipping in your narration. Possibly you can put dividers in? That would be nice.