thats unfair. it's been a year and a half! UPDATE!it's amazing, please!

Your writing is so amazing. Update immediately!

oh im intrigued. havent started reading yet but youve got a good thing going with this idea. very original.

No. Not acceptable. NOT AT ALL ACCEPTABLE!!

THAT WAS AN AWFUL CLIFF HANGER! :D It just got REALLY REALLY good (not that the rest wasn't, i read BOTH stories in one day...today) and poor POOR Kally! And Roald! And Pip!

goshdarnit. Please update soon? I'd greatly appreciate it. I'll even giggle like a inspid school girl, and, and write horrible poetry to it and... well, I can't think of anything really cool... :P But hopefully you get my point...

Please update this soon? It's rather nessesary. I've grown rather attached to Ryan... hahaha
Muchas gracias,
Mickeygee

Wow, I just read all of this story in one sitting, and I absolutely love it. I look forward to the next chapter and hope that it will come soon! What a cliffhanger...

Your original characters are so well-written and well-characterized. I love pretty much all the Ryan and Kyrios scenes when they're being witty.

I really hope you update this soon, it's really good! I may have missed something, but what ever happened to the mask that Pip is supposed to wear? When is she supposed to wear it, again? Have her lessons improved?

Please continue to update! While this story is confusing at times, it had piqued my interest. Good job. :)

WHAT? No MORE?!

I meant to review each chapter, but then I got caught up...

Love it- excellent imagery, good flow (especially those bits at the beginning of the legend) Beautifully written, and now the plot is-!

Amazing... I love the conflict Pip finds herself in, between her future hopes and then Roald... And of course those poor royals and their problems...

I love all the characters- Kel doesn't seem as Kel-ish as she could be... but I admit that she's not major in this... But ROALD, you have nailed down!

Very intense- plot picking up and stuff tying in...!

Going on...

Hmm... sometimes your transitions are befuddling. Don't know when you're skipping in your narration. Possibly you can put dividers in? That would be nice.

*snigger*

Wow. Although, as of now, it seems that there's at least 3 entirely diff. stories going on... both greatly diverting, but different, which isn't good. They should weave in a little more soon, otherwise you'll be yanking us back and forth and taking away from the suspense and momentum of both...

"Where?" Buri and Kel chorused almost automatically- haha...

And Kally and her bodyguard, the mysterious stranger... although I must say that a herald would not announce him like that. :D

I like our evil Shang warrior. Can't believe you left off there, though...

Question- Pip isn't a page, right? So why's she sitting around with the squires? How did she meet them/become friends? I can see befriending Andi and Ryan, with the harpie incident, but the others...?

Things are beginning to make sense now... and I think Andi and Ryan are a cute pairing, goodness help me for obsessing over such things ... ;D

O... very good. The WildCat... she's somebody I need to write a piece on... someday...

Plot's forming... I like it a lot, though I'm a bit confused about how the royals and the mages come in still...

One thing- have you been jumping back and forth? In flashbacks? I think I've got it figured out now, but maybe that could have been clearly, I dunno...

"The Conté sense of humour is rather obscure." *snicker*

I have to admit, I've never thought of Kally as so obstinant. She's too much like her dad in this...

Ryan and Kel, hm? Where's Dom? (not that it bugs me too much, since Kel only had an inclination towards him and nothing else has developed there)

I like the plot line so far, although how Andi and Ryan and Kel tie in with it, I would like to know. And although the humorous mind-reading is fun, too much makes it go over the top into utter silliness. Which is also fun, but I feel like you're trying more for a serious, non-parody type story.

Hey,
Once again I'm sorry it took so long to review. I love it once again. However I just can't imagine Davir being corteous and Kalasin being so so...submissive. I love the ending. Its so heartstopping. If there were pages to this story I would say it was a page turner...so where's the next page. *If you didn't catch that, well than that was me subtly hinting UPDATE SOON*. Well good job again.
LadySapphriea