Wow! I love this story and your writing is amazing. Thanks for the clarification regarding mutants classes. I think I like where the story is going and the stuff between Jenny and Pyro is really cute. Showing John's past is really interesting and it only makes him cooler.

The only thing I have problem with is the Boston accent. It's hilarious.

a power that could make people sick, that's gotta strong! XDD keep updating, I LOVE THIS ONE!

Ok, the tevisions helped. I was able to follow the story. "fire-breathing kid" lol.

A few things though, it could just be me, but it seems like in the 2nd chapter Pyro was begging for a girl he barely knew to stay. That doesn't seem like something he would do. I understand that it's what made Jenny stay, instead of running off which would've changed the entire story, but I can't see him begging anyone for anything ever.

Why does it skip around time so much? One second its middle of November, the next its mid-December? It does show passing of time and all, but it does distract readers with trying to remember "ok, 2 paragraphs it was early November ago, now it's still early November, and next paragraph its mid December..." DSO you see how that can take away from the story? Especially when you have the breaks in the flow of the story. Instead of saying "December 10" do something like when Pyro wakes up in the storm and Mystique is telling him in the storm, he can be groggy and ask why there's a storm and she can reply "because its mid-December, remember?" or something like that. it takes less away from the story and doesn't interrupt the flow of things.

Of course, these are my opinions, it's your writing not mine.

Update soon

It could just be me, but when you write the story "ta not be able ta" "Yuh" "doa ta Bobby. Yuh wuh there with him" etc. its really distracting. I know that you're showing her speaking style, but I honestly get so caught up in trying to decipher what the character is trying to say that I can't follow the story.

I like this, I like how it's going

Whatever. How’s she gonna get better at doing her thing?”

Mystique smirked at him. “I have a feeling she’ll get to practice on lucky you.”

“Fuck.”

perfect. lol thats just pyros luck. great job

Oh, this is a great story! I like how you write Pyro, and how you show things from his past. And I love your Gambit as well! Jenny is a cool character, and I like her powers. All in all an excellent story!

Mia

omg u rele need to update soon! cause i am getting really anxious to see what happens

One of the best stories about Pyro I have ever read ! :D:D:D

Well, well, well... Johny Boy and Jenny are finally getting together! That was sweet.

Certh

nice as alwasyS!

Wow Alex . . .really great chapter. The beginning started off a little in the land of slowness, but the ending definitely made up for it. . . Looking forward to your next update! Keep up the awesome writing!

-Ally

OMG KEEP GOING I LOVE THIS STORIE!

O...ME LIKEY!

I love the introduction of Wanda and Pietro. Really well done. Looking forward to your next update!

-Ally