i getting better but who is this girl in Shinji head

You just... Forgot? That's awesome. Oh man.

Well, I like the story, though I am hoping the amnesia is just a short-term thing. Well

Awaiting the next.

There seem's to be no spelling or grammer problem's in this chapter but I can't give a soild reveiw untill I see more

I've always liked eva fiction where time travel was involved. It's interesting to see where the characters go.

I like the whole amnesia thing. It opens up the possibility of making some very comical moments as Shinji finds out about his "past."

OK, Read it for a bit.

My first thing is remove that most probable love interest line. It's distracting and doesn't really work for what you are doing here.

On the whole it reads a lot like every other SHinji goes back in time things. Not saying it's bad, but it's just a case of been there done that. Don't have SHinji automatically choosing Rei here. Fact is he did have some feelings for Asuka, so don't ignore those.

On the whole I don't mind how it's set up but you really need to fill it out some and then work the whole waff and romance in later in the fic. His drive at this point probably isn't just Rei, it's everyone he cared about to include Misato, Asuka, Touji, Kensuke, HIkari, and yes even his father.

Lord Deathscythe

Holie **... I'm also from Cairns. I'm also a story-writing bloke (18) who's written quite a block if I do say so myself. So I know what I'm talking about when I say that I see potential in this story and your writing. Your grammeric work and structure are above average, but that will improve with time. The content is somewhat lacking although the character insight is impressive.

However... four months...? For this much? If you wish for steady reviews then you also must have steady chapters. Let's leave it at that.

Also I like that you've given Shinji a spine, yet it's without raging teenage emotions or cynicism. Your own maturity is shining through your works and that is very impressive.

I want you to write more of this... *Gendo pose*

A different twist on a familiar theme, nice to see. And good spelling and grammar too, refreshing for this site as of late.

'The face was childish though, as if she wanted to continue living like one'

I love this line. I think it is a very appropriate description for Misato.

Very good, I'll be looking forward to seeing more of this.

Your story has a similar idea to one I am currently writing (not posted yet) and it is interesting how a similar idea can produce a different storyline.

For me as a foreigner your writing style is nice to read. I hope to be able to read more of you :-)