Can't wait to see where this goes, and how Dyne wilol get out of Burg. The story's just getting good, don't let it die here!

A painfully beautiful start to what I hope will be a truly epic story. Really like how you forshadowed/explained Althena's desire to be human.

And also, I know how it feels to have a story threatening to drive you crazy if you don't write it down. Good luck!

This story is really good. Please continue!

You're off to a pretty good start here, I gotta say. I'm curious to see where you're gonna take this.

This is beautifully written so far. I love your descriptions, especially the part where they danced around the room one last time.