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| Nerd-08 2007-08-02 ch 1, anon. | abuseThat was weird but it was funny too! I thought that was Two-bit in the house at first. "Oh no you didn't!" |
| GreaserFreak13 2007-07-27 ch 1,  | abuseHaha...I liked the sumarry. The gang...and pudding. Classic. |
| soda's girl 2007-07-02 ch 1, | abusehahahaha...PUDDING FIGHTS! good times...god times... |
| Flag 2007-07-02 ch 1, | abuseOkay, that was fairly funny. It wasn't ROFL! hilarious, and it wasn't without humour. I think maybe it would have been better had you said Pudding a few less time, and somehow used their names less. I must have read both things about 100 times in that fic, although I realize it's hard to find a word to replace with Pudding, and with all the gang around it's hard to find a way to refer to them without their names, so it's not a very big deal. Just for future reference if you write a humor fic, repetition is good, but too much repetition starts to take away. Was that Johnny that started it? haha, that just made it ten times more funny. I didn't realize it until I went looking through it... Maybe would have been better had you said who it was at some point? Because Johnny is the least expected person to start a pudding fight. And maybe you could have described the mess more, how they somehow got pudding in the light fixture, Johnny's hair was yellow from lemon, and Pony looked like he painted his hands brown. I'm not trying to critisize here, so don't take this wrong! I like the fic, and it was funny... I just saw your authors note, and thought I'd give a little... It's not exactly concrit, but... Well, don't take it the wrong way! Just trying to give a little help for the future, I suppose. And we have the same instant pudding problem too :) Always seem to have it on hand, even though we've had it once in the past three years. |