This is a great story! Why do you want to stop working on it! You HAVE to continue it, especially if you stopped at a cliffhanger! I want to know what happens to Jak! Please continue this series! PLEASE! I love reading it! Its one of the best series I've ever read!

well i really hope you don't end this story here! it's confusing a little, but it is still worth the read! so please don't give up on it!

Might not be finished? Aww...

Well, I thought it was pretty interesting and I'd want to see it continued. :[

Great story, write more soon. Will Jak meet everyone else later (Torn, Keira, Ashelin, etc.)?

I think "the city will die" is a metaphor for it's gonna be blown to bits, but it'll build back up but be completely different, or something like that :nodnod:

well, it's off to a good start,well written while not being too dramatic or out of character.

Fantastic start! Loved it!