 Ratchet McCloud 2007-07-02 . chapter 1This is a good start. However, I must point out one inconsistency: You start off saying that Tails is a few months into his 15th year, but later on you say that Tails is 15. This is a contradiction; if Tails is a few months into his 15th year, then he has not celebrated his 15th birthday yet and therefore is only 14, not 15. All that aside, as I said, this is a pretty good start; I'd like to see where this goes.
Keep up the good work and please update.
P.S.: I apologize for being picky. It's just that I am obsessive-compulsive about correcting errors. |