This is a great story so far. It is fairly rare to see a fic using Yui (while inside Eva 01) as a plot-device and I don't believe that I have ever seen a fic that had Yui and Lilith collaborating together...I don't think that I have even seen Lilith used much as a plot-device in the first place. In any case, great job so far and I have no real complaints to make. There may have been a grammatical error or two, but I don't remember them at the moment and they don't effect the reading of the story. I can't think of anything to suggest so...I don't have much else to say other then, I can't wait to read the next chapter.

. . . Wow, you must have taken a few psycholgy classes, a philosophy class and a comupter class or two to come up with all that techno mumbp-jumbo. I think my brain exploded at least 5 times while readng this. Not that I'm complaining, oddly, I LOVE this fic, but I'm not sane, so that may be why.
Love the phrasiologies you've used. They are all. . . so. . . *in charater* Although i'm a bt lost on all that stuff to do wth 'creating the second impact' and all that, but thats the only hole n the story that is really all that big.
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~Immortal Sailor Cosmos

Pretty good.

Personally, I would have expected the MAGI to be programmed in pure PROLOG (which would have been equally readable, I think, and would have saved you a ton of typing :-), however pseudocode is fine I guess -- since you kept to a relatively consistent and limited syntax, it could be possible that what you wrote could be made into some form of programming language understandable by a supercomputer AI.

Yeah, I love the ShinjixRei, definitely -- and I think your analysis of Rei in the last few chapters is spot-on -- but at the same time I think the MAGI should perhaps play a bigger role (I very much like the idea of the MAGI as characters, and both Lillith and Yui, as portrayed by you, are kind of negative, scheming characters -- like SEELE and Gendou, though their intentions may be good, their machinations give them the feel of villains).

Yes, this is good. I can tell you're nearing an impasse though. Call it writer's intuition, but I can tell that the plot bunnies are starting to hide from you.

Like I said, this is a good fic. I most definitely want to see more, even if some of the words go right over my head. Yes, I had to double-take a few times to find the meanings of what you're trying to convey. This is by no means a bad thing, as it did make me think.

Ja!

Well, this is an interesting change of pace from most stories! I can't wait till the next chapter!

Great chapter. Casper will be a valuable ally to their purposes.

Hm... What will happen with Rei and Shinji...

Best of luck on the next chapter.

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It's been a while, and despite your 'distaste' for this story, its still high quality. By the way, I agree with your analysis of Asuka, but usually its easier to keep such thoughts to oneself instead of risking Asuka-fan wrath. However, to use an Eva-ish idea, there isn't really a 'true' Asuka, just everyones separate interpretations of her. However, that's somewhat off topic; the final bit with the MAGI was creative. Most people seem to either treat the MAGI as simply a 'personalitied' supercomputer or completely free-willed. It's interesting to have a middle of the road version

I like the way you gave the Maji the choice.
it dosent suprise me that Casper was the
one to accept the new code.

cant wait for more.

The world will end the day computers think they are sentient. Anyway nice chapter. This is a pretty good story to read, I also like the personalities you bestowed on everyone. Don't give up the story, please.

Very well thought out. I like the seriousness this is done in and how deep you're digging to match things up.

I myself am not a good writer by far, but know that every story told must take some side time to help explain itself - it also makes the occuring events more realistic as scheming is not all action, but a build up until it pounces in this case.

Make it great.

Wow, you really went deep with this story. You display the emotions of everyone really well, as well as what type of people they are. Your writings a bit hard to understand at times, but its still good. Please write more, because I'll be reading^^

Write on!

I'm liking it very much. I hope to see more. It's an interesting take on Yui and Lilith.

I can see it coming. I know you're going to do it. Yui vs the Magi. ...Please hurry!
Great fic, please update soon!

Actually, I think you did a great job with this movement. Nothing brings me more fear then a jealous woman inside a eva. Also, it appears that Lilith might be, what's the word, lacking common sense, which is also quite funny. so now the girls have got to take on the magi. b* fight imminent. please turn out another great chapter

Another hilarious chapter. I know we're already headed for trouble when a powerful angel and Yui are starting to but heads.
Nice omake as well, had me laughing so hard I was writhing in agony. Keep up the good work