Reviews for Midori no hibi: Unforgettable

Shadow of a Fallen Angel 2007-11-06 ch 1,	abuseThis was fun to read. You did a good job at writing it :)
BlueLion 2007-09-09 ch 1,	abuseThe fic starts promising enough, but in the second half you just press together too much. You should have detailed the conflict with her mother, her decision to break up, the time she's trying to get into other relationships a lot more ... giving insight into the inner turmoils and conflicts of Midori as well ... How about outlining the thoughts of her mother and Seiji as well? It wouldn't have hurt to make the fic longer and divide into chapters either ... Instead you present just a rushed huddle of events - try better next time!
GaNGsta GaL 2007-09-02 ch 1,	abuseWow, Seiji is really loyal to Midori but you went to fast on the ending part and it is hard to read because i think your afraid to you much Enter button like the first reviewer said... but i like it!
sara haruko takenouchi kami... 2007-07-04 ch 1,	abuseare you afraid of the enter button?