Ignore the bad story was good and I liked try to give more dimension to the characters,and make it a little longer.

It's not bad, but I'm not going to say it's exactly good either. It's a little short, and the characters seem flat. Maybe work on giving them a bit more personality, even if it means writing a heck of a lot more to do it.

Plus, it's spelled EDI for Extreme Deep Invader.

Ignore the last review. They're wrong. You are a great writer. Seriously. I really liked this.

I didn't like your story. No offense but it was very lame. You are not a writer. So just STOP!

Anywho. Keep your day job.

write more,please.

I like it, it was a nice little story.