I really like this piece.
Not only am I still a fain of Foah and Shuis, but I love how it was written. You really show how Fancy is still in love with Noah, and how heart keeps on breaking for him. Fantastic.:)

I always hated Fancy and Luis. hahaha. That girl is crying over Noah even though her boyfriend is dead. i find it really interesting that Paloma is not crying over her dead brother though. Up-date this. Maybe you could make it a mystery...Fancy killed Luis to get Noah for herself. Just a thought!