"Yes, Jane, sweetheart?"

"Shut up!"

*laughs* Hillarius! What's more, this is very true to character. Very good! Love it!

LOL! cuuuuuuuute! write on!

I love this! It's perfect, I can so imagine Jane saying shut up a million times to Neil and Neil calling Jane sweetheart (the way it should be) Kepp writin'

hahaha! neil is so cool! i liked this very much.

LMAO! The weirdest thing is that I can actually see them having that conversation! Very funny!

Heh Heh:-)

Taz

! I frickin' laughed my arse off!

Heheh... That was hilariously amusing.

Wahh! On the favorites1 I can actually see this happening, too! great job! :D

roflol. that was funny! if u ever decide to write a sequal, i'll read it! and plus, that's SO something that neil would do!

Awwww... This was fun! I really liked the Deep Eyes *sob* Where's a bunch of Phoenix Downs when you need them? Anyway, I love reading about this team. More please?

hahahaha. great piece! i really enjoyed this one, hope you'll write more.

Hehe... nice job. Deep Eyes Yellow-Suits in Star Trek. Dead sometime, eh? But good stuff nonetheless. "Keep it up, kid!"

ROFLMAOWBSEGOMF...This is really funny, hillarious and I can really imagine this in prequel or in the movie...you're a good writer, I enjoy your other fics also..:D..Btw, anyone...would this be better, if it's located on the movie section? rather than mixed with the other FF games? :D

Just browsing the "Final Fantasy" stories looking for "The Spirit Within" fics, and I must say this is by far the best I've read so far. You seem to have the "voices" of the Deepeyes down. Considering how recently the movie came out, I'm surprised (pleasantly) to find quality fanfics on it so soon. Keep up the good work.