great story.

great story.

Congratulations! It's hard to believe this is your first story. Maybe it's just fun to examine these stories from someone else's outside point of view, but you wrote very well and made me chuckle most of the way through your tale. Well done!

I really liked this story and thought it was really good for the author's first time writing a fan-fic. I hope they'll write some more stories like this and I enjoyed it.

Excellent! GREAT point of view with wonderful and well written insights! MORE!