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| Mwezi 2007-08-23 ch 3,  | abuseYou've been so kind in your reviews to my stories, that I thought I'd stop by and take a look at yours! It quite good for being your first fic, and in a foreign language as well, I know how that is, seeing as I'm in the same situation myself. Well, I didn't see many grammar mistakes, but I have to agree with Lira W.M on the Japanese-part. It's fine with a few words now and then, but don't make it too much. Anyway, it was an interesting plot, and even though I'm more of a Kakashi/Anko fan, variation is always good. Keep up the good work, and take care! |
| LiraWM 2007-07-19 ch 3, | abuseHurray! Finally I got the chance to read your story hehehe sorry Prophet got a bunch of things to do that I didn’t have the time until now. Well I like how Gai’s doing his performances (I noticed that in any fic that I read I find him hilarious) Anyway I like the plot, also the Dragon eyes are good. Also I like that you’re using a hidden village that most of the authors (including myself) doesn’t use. After all snow village sounds good and after the movie sounds even better. Anyway the only thing I don’t like that much is that you’re using way too much of Japanese. Not that I don’t understand it, but the problem is that most of the readers find this annoying for the fact that they don’t quite get it. Also the profiles I recommend you use them in your author notes or mention her characteristics along with the story, don’t use a section for that hehehe. And try to make Kakashi a little bit more serious, so this would be a blast. Anyway keep on working, you’re doing a good for being your first fic and in a foreign language. Take care! Lira W.M |