 F0g13 2007-07-12 . chapter 1What can I say? This story was amazing and very enjoyable to read. I picked up on a lot of inside jokes, and noticed that some parts had your dirty yet sarcastic and dry humor (Craig's wet dream? funny).
I liked how you captured Craig and Ashley trying to conceal their emotions on their wedding day. That was very in character. The sappy parts were nice, but I really loved the angsty flashbacks. Drunk Ashley was an inside thing, right? Anyway, that was a fitting touch.
Like Nikki, I too enjoyed how you broke Jimash up. It seemed appropriate for Ashley's downfall you set her on in your story. I can see it playing out in my head and the aftermath of her decision. I really wish that happened on the show! It would confirm our speculation that season 6 Ashley is a train wreck.
The lovey-dovey dialog was so Crash, and the ending was perfect. Overall the way you set up both Craig and Ashley's characters, how you developed them, and how they ended up back together was very true to their characters and realistic (even from a non-shipper POV). You need to write more stories! ;)
-Kathy |
 Mayberry 2007-07-11 . chapter 1"He loved to peel her apart". SIGH. I think that's why Ashley's so afraid to be with him. He gets her like no one does. But that whole paragraph was gorgeous.
Craig having dirty thought about Ellie? Wha? Lol. But no, your explanation of how they repaired their friendship is totally plausible. Why does Marco have to go through all this? :D
Larry and Ms. Mumford getting down and dirty. Great!
Aw, the proposal was so cute. I can see Craig doing that, but whoa, he was nervous! I liked how Joey thought he'd lost it. Only for Ashley, man. :)
Believable end to Jimash. It was good that you put him on Craig's side and that he tried to warn him about Ashley. Craig wouldn't listen anyway. History repeats itself...
Yes! We all hate that fugly pink hat. Best moment ever! "Everyone hates my hat". Bwahaha! Laughing hard here...
Jimbo...that is HIS name, no matter what. Drunk Ashley is cracking me up.
"You can take the girl out of the goth, but you can't take the goth out of the girl". I enjoyed how the history of the song is at the end of the fic. Suited the moment for a wonderful ending.
Overall, well-done. I thought the lyrics fit exceptionally well, and it was great to hear about pre-wedding CrAsh, planning the wedding CrAsh, cutesy laidback CrAsh, CrAsh with a clean Craig...all the different variations which can truly happen in the future if the writers make the attempt. Wonderful! Thanks so much, Nicole! I expect more in the future. Or my name isn't Nikki. :P |