this is an amazing story. i love the detail and attention you've put into these 6 chapters. i hope you haven't abandoned this story cuz it is honestly one of the better ones i've read. and i agree with your viewings of rowling. its saddening even though it is only fiction. please continue i'm putting you on alert and as fav story, thank you so much for posting this piece of artwork and i hope soon for an alert!

But wait... In a previous chapter you said that Dumbledor did all the things he did becuase Snape was using potions to sway him. And before that you said that Snape wasn't all that good at potions and that he cheated and stole information. But then, you say that he was good at potions...I'm confused. It seemes that you forget what you say in previous chapters. I also wish that your stories would have more of a descriptive quality to them. It seemes more like a list of things that happen and conversation, rather than a story. More narrative would do this story good. It also seemes that you are making this story too perfect. You are making this too easy on your chracters. If you don't have any conflict in a story it becomes stagnant and uninteresting. These are just some tips for improving your story telling in the future. Wish you the best of luck with this story.

I love how you keep changing there names into things that still flow the way it should (slither things and bumble more)lol.

well: i'm on board to wherever this fic leads to

on a side notes in regards with the 7th book, while i agree that it was 'not as it should be,' i do appreciate the turn about that Snape pulled off in the end

in this fanfic, however, i can ignore that one redeeming quality and accept him as the bastard that you apparently make him out to be and more

so...I'll be looking forward to your next update, then

BTW: while i'm not entirely fond of the uber-long dialogues/diatribes, they are interesting and the fact that you add in certain twists of events in the middle that makes the whole situation funny makes up for it...in short, there's nothing to complain about and more to compliment about in regards to your writing unless it suddenly becomes imbalanced in terms of dialogue to action in future chapters

Another brilliant story you've got going here. In this one, like the other, you use unnecessary nicknames that detract from the content in my opinion (Slyther-things, vulturewart, Dumbles). They take away some of the maturity of the story, making it harder to take even the most well-thought-out arguments (which yours may well be) completely seriously. The nickname thing is something I forgot to address in my review of your other piece, and it's a very small thing in both stories. However, I wouldn't be a conscientious reviewer if I didn't tell you what was on my mind. It's up to you whether to take my suggestions to heart.

Like I said, this is really brilliant, and I'm very impressed with how much thought you put into your ideas.

Looking forward to more.

Hmm... Very intriguing start! It's got a nice pace to it! I especially love the ghosts... Hermione in particular...

Though, I can't help but say... From a reader's point of view, or at least mine, the author rant at the beginning, quite nearly made me dismiss reading any further. I believe we are all entitled to our opinion on DH, people like it, people hate it... Whatever. But I think when opinions are forced upon each other, it's very hard to see past that. For example, my first impression of this story, without even reading past the author's note, was that it was going to be a biased, poorly researched story created merely for the sake of bashing the parts you didn't like or agree with. I just wanted to let you know what my impression was, as one of your readers, when reading it.

Then, with that out of the way... I'm extremely glad that I was able to get past the AN and into a beautiful story. Thank you!

Heh. The winning of Narcissa is a bit silly but Lily's reaction was amusing.

I've been wondering all along what they were going to do about Pettigrew. NO WAY will Harry - or his friends, I trust - allow his parents to come to harm, this time.

awsome

God I love the spot on anylasis of the older generation of canon figures you present in this fic.

To focused on what they want to the exclusion of all else.

To fearful of any change to evaluate reality in any logical meaningful way.

Partially Kissed Hero by Lionheart

30 minutes that changed everything by Radaslab

and this one are the best for realistic or imaginativly rational responses and actions in the face of canons insanity.

KEEP IT UP AND POST MORE SOON!

This is going to end up being one *weird* story. We'll have Harry ... then the three girls 'native' to this timeline - Hermione, Luna and Ginny ... and then the three newly-incarnated ghosts - Anastasia, muggle!Ginny and Hermione Greengrass.

It looks like our Hermione isn't going to look anything like the native one, if the Greengrasses use an inheritance ritual, but the other two, will they look like twins of their 'native' counterparts?

Weird story. Hard to 'believe' in, given the comic antics of Urd. And the snot-slurping ... ugh! But other aspects of it are very welcome reading. Your depiction of the Marauders. Luna's wish, here. The girls' kinship with Harry.

I was hoping that the girls would get to live again, so I'm pleased it's happened, even if Urd's reapparance was something of a deus ex machina. Hopefully this means that this is the last time I'll see Luna's intestines, yuck!

Definitely like it and approve! Good work, well thought out idea and I look forward to reading more. :) Thank you.

Good Story

goddamn, dude, you are pathetic. do you know how the internet works?

first, you need to stop using whatever shitty browser you've been using since 1994 and join the rest of us in the 21st century. then you need to download a real browser. It's called mozilla firefox, it's free, and it will block the scripts from the site and the advertisers that cause your computer to seize up.

Problem solved. And you know, a 12-year-old could have fixed it for you without subjecting us all to another whiny, bitch-fest about how everyone is out to get you. grow up.

Hey,

Just wanted to say, great story so far, I'm sad to hear you're having issues with the website. I don't know much about posting on other sites, but have you tried ?

Good luck with your fanfics, I really like where you've taken this one. You're right, there are way too many clichés these days (my own unfinished one included I'm afraid!), so it's good to read something new and different. Keep up the good work!

rifraf