Not bad. An interesting idea that happens to be written well. I would love to see this updated.

This is fabulous so far. I can't wait for you to continue (or atleast post whatever you've already got). I really want to see a head-to-head battle between the Major and Togusa, or at the very least a bit of bickering. But whatever you do, I'm sure it'll be great. Please update!

Like the idea of Togusa clashing later with his Section 9 comrades.

That was seriously awesome! Got a good sense of humor too! What does transcribing mean?