wow that is really deep, its very realistic and so true. its a really great story best of luck in your future stories you have great talent!

Beautifully written. I like how you kept the origins of Varon's nationality intact. (I believe I remember reading off a site that Varon originally came from Spain. Still don't understand why 4Kids used a guy with an Australian accent.)

that was absoultly incredible.i luved it.by the waydoes anyone know who valons girlfriend is?if you do,please tell me i need to know. she has the same email adress as me.please tell me!and i luve the story,again.

Wow your take on Varon's birth is kind of like what I always pictured! I really thought this was fantastic! Good job!

that was wonderful!

Very nice, Sweetie Pie. I like it. Though it would be nice to carry it over to his childhood and then to adolescence until he joined Doma.

That was beautifully written and very sad. Poor baby Varon!

Yay! Now I can review!
Wow, I really felt for this character in so few words! Varon comes from tough stuff!
Very sad. But very sweet. "A kicking, squirming hot water bottle." - I don't think I've ever heard that before!
Kudos!
~Una

Good start. It brought tears to my eyes. I love this.

This is absolutely beautiful... I cried as she breathed her last breath and when little Varon seemed to know that his mommy was gone.

My God, that was fantastic!! Once I got the alert, I stopped my LJ thing and came straight here. I wasn't disappointed. Great work and I love the fact that the characters are given depth.

You're talent lies with your literary and artistic skill, mine lies in the technical and the visual. It is definitely worth the read. *glomps*