Very well-written! I'm pretty surprised this doesn't have many reviews. Any, what can I say that the other reviewers haven't? Everyone was very in-character! Even though it is indeed odd that Steiner is so innocent, it's very cute, and seems surprisingly IC. Agree about the commas, too (there seem to be a few missing). I loved the ending, too. Made me smile. :) Thanks for this fic, keep up the good work!

Daw, that was an adorable story... I logged on to find badfic and make fun of it, but I found a goodfic and showed it to her instead!

I'm so glad I found a nice story! Steiner-centric too! My baby Steiner needs some more love. Beatrix and I can only give him so much...

There were a few parts when I thought a comma would be needed. The dialogue didn't seem to flow as well without them. I once read that people tried to remove unneeded commas in Shakespear's plays and the actors didn't know when to pause. I only assume it applies here as well.

Also, Steiner seemed a little... TOO innocent. I mean, I like him acting all bashful like that, but that night in the 3rd disk when they met, they practically grabbed each other for a kissfest. I suppose one could write it off as hormones taking over, but I think you may want to look that over one more time.

Anyway, the story itself was very good and I enjoyed reading it. I'm glad it was long enough to be fun but short enough that I could finish it tonight (it's nearly midnight here).

Also, the story didn't seem... meaty enough... Maybe a teensy more description? I'm done critiquing now. =D

Much Love:
Christy

Oh Lordy, poor Steiner! After all that hard work. :D But as stated, a very cute little ficlet indeed. And a new, interesting take on their relationship in this light.

I liked how you pulled in the characters, leaving them intact and not O.O.C. in the slightest bit; right down to Zidane's cocky attitude, Ruby's accent and light-heartedness to Steiner's prim and proper demeanor. Very well done.

Started out absolutely wonderful and wrapped up nicely with a good twist and glimmer of hope for the Captain and General. Excellent job and hope to see more like this. Great work and Keep it up!

This was really cute, I enjoyed it :D

Cute story and pretty good for your first! I like it, I like it. Favorited!