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Reviews For: His love is Pain

Niysa
2008-09-14
ch 1,
abusewow! this goes perfectly with a zutara video im making! good job!
renagrrl
2007-07-14
ch 1,
abuseThis is pretty angsty, but not in a bad way. I only noticed two errors--one a spelling error; the other was a grammar issue. Nothing too glaring, though.

Also, was this set for just after "Crossroads of Destiny"? If it was, I think it would be better for her feelings to be more conflicted, as opposed to loving. It seemed a little early for Katara to feel that way. While I think she would still be betrayed, I don't know it would be a in love way...Or maybe that's just me?

Anyway, good job on one of your first fics--keep it up!
QuicktoSee
2007-07-14
ch 1,
abuseKatara is in "live" with Zuko? Might want to fix your summary there.
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