Sweet! Very touching!

"If he mentions mares and foals one more time, I truly think that I will strike him."

I definitively like your humour!

I liked the glimpse of Eomer, and also the metaphor about Elboron's little fist. The writing, as ever, is excellent. I like how you capture the stress, the waiting, etc..."The door opens. Arwen emerges. She smiles!": You can feel the tension and then the relief!

Aw... good feelings all around. : )

I liked how this story was from Faramir's perspective. Very well done. I loved seeing an image of Elboron's birth. :-)

Wow. Goose bumps again. And I mean it! :))

Short as it is, this ficlet is perfect! I like Aragorn's perspective, and the way Elboron is showed and hailed by the people of Gondor! Oh, and Eowyn giving birth in the White City was the best choice! :)

As for Faramir's prophecy and Aragorn's last words... they are both so solemn and inspired that Tolkien himself would have been proud to have written them! Congratulations! :)

Oh. My. God. This little piece gave my goose bumps! Literally.

The first thing I can think of is that it's well-written. VERY well-written. From the Tolkienesque style to the "roundness" it gets from mentioning Earendil's star and the perfectly chosen title. Another point for writing is that you used the first person and Present Simple, it makes the narrative extremely dramatic and dynamic! Perfect choice here! :)

I'm not sure if the Queen of Gondor herself would assist other women in childbirth, or if a newborn baby actually has the force to grip a finger with his small hand... But in the story these elements are very well inserted! :)

And I totally like your characterization of Faramir and Eomer! I couldn't help but grin at this line: "Éomer paces back and forth, stopping only to crack his knuckles. If he mentions mares and foals one more time, I truly think that I will strike him." It is amusing, but very true as well, and shows the tension they both were feeling...

So, all in all, a very beautiful ficlet! :) On to the second part now!

Jass a.k.a. The Little Dwarf

This was so beautiful.

This is a marvelous piece! So glad I wandered over to lindahoyland's c2 and found it listed there! Great emotion, and hope, and bittersweet remembrance all rolled into one. And I loved how Faramir came to the name for his son. We've always known what the name was, and for whom it was given, but not the reasoning behind it from Faramir's POV.

FYI, you did miss a comma in this chapter, if you care: "He is already loved, this newest son of Gondor" I observed

- Deandra

Hello Raksha,

you asked for a review and here it is:

I LOVE stuff like this - I could read it all day, just sitting in front of the computer with a silly, soppy grin on my face. I have a real weakness for fluff - the same kind of weakness as the one I have for chocolate. This is a choccy fic!

The only downside to it - I see no spelling or grammar errors - you are a meticulous writer - is that it has short paragraphs, and there is not enough development. This is a pretty thumbnail sketch, but I find I want to know more about the characters, their culture (since there's not a lot of Tolkien info' about childbirth, you can look up accounts from other similar cultures and have an absolute field day) and their attitudes. There's not a lot here.

The first part is easy enough to solve - just join up those paragraphs that are related to each other. The rest may involve a bit of research and some extrapolation from the books and movies.

In short, it's too short.

There are minor typo errors - look over the fic as it appears online, and you will see what I mean. Personally, I write my fics in Notepad and save them as RTF because of the way the FF. net system messes things up if I don't.

Finally, you need to change the summary to something like this:

"In the early years of the Fourth Age, as Gondor enjoys the blessings of peace after the Fall of Sauron, one child is born and another is envisioned."

I look forward to reading and enjoying the rewrite.

His grey eyes glinted as if he could pierce the very veils of time. "When your heir is born, he will be Gondor's son, and more. He will be a gift of the Eldar to Men; and he will inherit all that we fought for, all the hope you brought us, and all that you will build. His name shall be cried not only in Gondor but throughout all the lands of Middle-earth."

Awesome! So short?

Update soon!

I love these two lines - “Welcome,” I whisper. “Thou art most welcome, my son.” Ah, surely I am the most fortunate of all men!

“My brother was Boromir, Faithful Jewel,” I proclaim. “My son shall be Elboron, Faithful Star.”

And I also loved the beginning where he calls Eowyn his speaking of mares and foals! Ha! Cute!

I love the way you show the friendship between Aragorn and Faramir here, Faramir's joy in his newborn son and the way you link it to the rebirth of Gondor.

A lovely ficlet about the birth of Elboron.I loved the solidarity between both the men and the women. I always imagine Arwen as willing to help Eowyn too.

Beautifully written-I liked how you used both Aragorn's and Faramir's POV's.

That was beautiful, and a lovely look into Faramir's thoughts.

Thank you for sharing it with us.

Violin Ghost

Aw... Very sweet, and nicely written.

Sarah x