Holy. Crap. Someone pass me a bucket to throw up in. No wait, I think I'll throw up on the author of this horrible, horrible fanfiction. This story is absolutely ridiculous and sucks. Shame on those who have actually complimented this. Can you not tell a good ff from a bad one? You must be half blind if not completely blind to even think it is good. When is Lily Evans ever BFFs with James, of course they get together in the seventh year, but you said it yourself. This her FIFTH year at Hogwarts. And what happened to Lily's character? Obviously lost in some twisted fantasy of yours. NEVER EVER WRITE AGAIN AND SPARE ALL OF US FROM PAIN! Anyways, okay, so Lily just suddenly changes from smilling to screaming? All I can say at this point is, WTF? Since when does Lily fight people? And, why is Lily so upset? She is upset because Janna said something mean to her after she just fought her with her fists? That is the stupidest thing ever.

"Lily! You are beautiful and I love you!" You're F-ing kidding me, right? And then the rest of the ff, so corny and overused! THIS WAS ABSOLUTELY HORRIBLE! NEVER WRITE AGAIN AND SAVE THE POOR PEOPLE WHO HAVE TO READ IT FROM CAPSLOCKERIA! haha...

Because of this story. There are some many Horrible parts in this. First of all, Lily clearly disliked James in the fifth year, it says so in the fifth book. Go, please. Leave your computer and never write again. Pick up a Book and read it.

Second of all, what kind of a nickname is Lil? Too cliche, canon Lily would probably hate tha nickname. And Janna? This is England in the 1970's, for goodness sake. You've got some grammar errors around there too, "she asked a smile creeping onto her pretty face". Lack of commas, I could die!

Pretty is used too much. Lily has a temper, but does not suddenly start cussing. James is a brave little boy, and doesn't get scared by a very non-canon Lily.

Unless people walk very fast and/or Lily walks as slow as a snail, how in the world did the "whole of the school" make it there before she did? Plus, this is Hogwarts, not some Hannah Montanna episode. People don't like watching people fight. Plus, If "Janna" and "Lil" faught like savages, wouldn't a teacher stop them?

Lily is a nice girl who was FRIENDS with Severus in the fifth year and was probably unprejudice against the Slytherins (not all of them we're bad. In fact, I want to punch you for making Slytherins seen overly-evil. I also want to punch you for making such fic.)Lily is also a sensible girl who doesn't believe in people like that saying thingws like that. She's probably snort. Like my friend says, crawl in a hole and die!

Lastly, what kind of guy says "I love You" to their best friend with temper issuses when they're fifteen and where just dumped by another girl? Not one a nice, sensible canon girl like "Lil" would want to date!

You wrote this years and years ago, I think. It's only my pledge to review every story that I read that's prompted a response to this, after all this time.

Dreadful. Made me laugh hysterically, and simultaneously vomit in my mouth. Sorry, babe. I can only say now that I hope your writing has shown improvement. If not, then quit now.

"her face was the same colour as her hair, from her lack of patience."

My face is the same colour as Lily's hair, from laughing.

This is so funny!

(unless this isn't actually a parody fic, in which case I apologise if I hurt your feelings.)

Tell me this was a parody. Please tell me you did't actually think that this would work as a serious fanfiction.

If it was meant as a joke, congratualtions. I almost cried with laughter. If it was meant to be serious, quit now. It was awful.

Maybe you should practise a bit more before submitting anything else.

Why did you even write? For goodness sake, do something else!

'Her small nose was wrinkled in disgust at the book she was reading and her face was the same colour as her hair, from her lack of patience.'

That was so irrelevant. "Same colour as her hair?" Too cliched. "From her lack of patience?" Where did that come from? There was nothing in that sentence that mentions her patience and pop! it appears out of thin air.

I'm not even berating you for your bad grammar. Are those people crazy of what? Ew. You killed Lily.

"I followed her trying to persuade her not to do anything; everyone who had witnessed what had just happened followed me. Soon word went round that there was going to be a fight and the whole of the school was soon in the Great hall to see what would happen."

That was so exaggerated. Hogwarts is not even that kind of school. Did this kind of thing even happen at school? "the whole of the school was soon in the Great hall to see what would happen"

Hello! There are people out there who can't be bothered. Besides, how could the WHOLE school know about it and reach the great hall even before Lily does? It's not making sense.

And besides, You don't just say I Love You to your enemy of 5 years and you kiss and make up. That's not all..

"Lily! You are beautiful and I love you!"

Hahaha. That was soo funny! Wait, this is not supposed to be humorous. Oops, sorry! My mistake! Boo, Gina, boo!

"I had never felt like that when I had been kissed before. I slid my hands around her waist and hers were around my neck. We fit together perfectly and I promised myself that I would never let anything or anyone take her away from me now that I had found her."

One word: Cheesy.

That paragraph was okay, only the last part. 'Now that I had found her'

He didn't find her. It's not like Lily was lost or something, so it's not relevant.

Stop writing and pollute my eyes, or other people's for that matter. If you can't write, then don't write. It's no wonder you had writer's block!

To the losers who reviewed this(except for the previous 2 reviewers): Are you people blind or something? Or have you never read GOOD LJ srories before? I pity you then.

To Gina: Fanfiction is not a place for you. Go somewhere else and wallow in self-pity.

*Spits*

what's wrong with you? and what's wrong with with the other people who've reviewed this (minus the person below)? 'this is so so so so god'.. i mean, wtf? read it again people. or dont. actually, please don't.

sort lily's character out. she's hardly the hardcore slutty, happy slapping type. and even if she was, she'd at least have some decent insults.

Um. Ew.

I'm sorry, but this was CRAP. I mean, 5th year Lily? Yeah, she kind of, um, really really disliked James. And remember how they got together in their SEVENTH YEAR? Yeah, that said s-e-v-e-n-t-h, not f-i-f-t-h, dear.

Also, the way Lily behaved was complete bullshit. Her moods were completely crazy. Lily is not on crack. She is a normal human who gets aggravated by James Potter. After said aggravation, she does not have a bitchslapping fight with his ex-girlfriend and then proclaim her undying love for James.

Sorry.

lol, cute

Thank you for reviewing my story. This is beautiful, I love it!

AWWWWW! SO sweet!

nice one...

That's really kawaii!

nice

AWWWWWWW! LoL I luuuuvvv James/Lily fics. They're all mush and arguements and I lluuuuuvvv mushy stuff and arguements! Yay! Great story!